pretty fools

Babe

Let's walk to the shrine

Hold my hand trust my vibe

Look at the sky

Never see me lie

She never sees my lies

She only sees my smiles

I think I've got my prey

Let's walk to the shrine

Pray to a God or two

Make a song or two

Make a promise or two

Break one or two

Babe take a sip become my fool

Let's walk to the shrine

Break a light or more

She thinks I want to see her true

But I just want her nude

Oh she never sees my lies

She's my own pretty fool

With pretty blind eyes

(she only sees me smile)

She's got a wide bright smile

(but mine is brighter)

(I know my game)

Let us walk to shrine

Keep me

Awake 

Keep me on

Top

Because

You see 

I never sleep

When I'm 

All

By 

Myself

Let's walk to the shrine

Reviews

[Jen_ma_cat]

Wow this is... I can't even find the words to express how I feel towards this poem. I think it's brilliant. Even though the narrator has his own goals in mind there is this adornment towards the other which makes it, cruelly romantic? I don't know what i'm talking about, I'm always scared of misinterpreting an authors poem. However I do love this poem very much, it's very alluring.

P.S I love all your poetry, I feel like our poetry, although very different styles, posses similair messages and can be rather dark. Keep writing Winter and I'll keep reading!

[secretinsanity]

I think that it is a simple yet strong meaning to poetry. The writer uses the words wisely and shapes them into a different format that is very appealing to the eye. It does draw the reader's attention.

I am not quite sure, but I think there is some indication that the "bedroom" (not mentioned in the poem obviously) is being symbolized as a shrine because the narrator cannot sleep alone because he/she doesn't like to be left alone?

It is interesting the word choices and the small amounts of ambiguity throughout the poem. I enjoyed reading it. There are no punctuation, which is probably a stylistic choice, but sometimes that would help and give it even more of an impact. However, leaving it the way it is, is fine as well.

I do like the title and how it goes along well with the poem the writer has written.

Keep writing!

[winter;lyra]

Thanks for your review and about the punctuation I really can't say it's a stylistic choice - that's just how it came out.
And shrine can mean a lot, I leave that to the reader's interpretation, it can be a physical location or a state of mind and/or affairs

[winter;lyra]

However, whatever it may be, the narrator wants her pretty fool to believe it is a shrine - it is important to have that in mind