Go To War, Son

Sought wisdom

Preached hope

Saw doom

All the love has been spent

So I leave you this song

Son

Feed mother

Feed brother

Kill another

Go to war and crawl son

Machine gun

Sword

Pick one

Ask who to kill

Smoke

Blood

Disease

See through

And live

Guilt-free 

And breathe

Son

Love us now

Love us then

Weep no more

Save the repent

To when

Your breath is spent

Feed mother

Feed brother

Kill another one

And once it is all spent

Carry all

But this song

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Your poetry. The song of the new world. A sad song.
"Feed mother
Feed brother
Kill another one"
The above lines. True and scary. Thank you my friend for sharing the outstanding and realistic poetry.
Coyote

[The Exiled Wolf]

This piece almost squeezed tears out of me. It depicts the sad situation when wars and kills are "necessary" to earn one's life. Helplessness oozes from each of the rhythmic lines. The final stanza is my favorite - it brings hope back.

And once it is all spent
Carry all
But this song

Hope that this song will never be sung again. Let it be forgotten together with all the pains wars are bringing to humanity.

[winter;lyra]

Thank you for your review, I think you absorbed the meaning as I wanted it to be except for the last part - not saying that you're wrong, I think it's a very acceptable interpretation, in my mind I took "Once it is all spent" as "Once you're dead", as in leave this song to your son who, unfortunately, will have continue your war, therefore continuing the curse, therefore continuing the mad loop of violence. Quite grim compared to yours eh?

Also I didn't expect new reviews on this...it's so old....

[The Exiled Wolf]

Your original meaning is also an intriguing one. I also like this piece in that sense - this song fits perfectly in an epic game or novel!

P.S. There's nothing too old for review, as long as it is a good piece!

[winter;lyra]

Aye, my surprise is more because of the fact that you found it than the review itself

Also, sorry for the shameless self advertizing but if you enjoyed this you might find this interesting as well http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Meethaphore/1859645/

It is the same subject, but another point of view

[Tony Jordan]

These are very powerful and raw.
I have no frames of musical reference for lyrics like these Winter - what did you envisage - style-wise?
I'm guessing it's not The Eagles.

[winter;lyra]

no
freaking
idea

i just felt like it sounded like song lyrics
if anything, it'd be reggae?? i don't know much about reggae but that's the closest i think?

[J Todd Underhill]

Nice write... I host World Poetry Open Mic and would love for you to join us tonight. www.worldpoetryopenmic.net 8pm Mountain time and click listen live

[Uche Paul]

Beautiful Flow... Amazing Rhythm. Greetings to the bard!

[winter;lyra]

Thank you! And greetings :)