If I ever fall

If I ever fall 

To depths unknown to us

I hope these words will be clear enough

As a trail of lost words in lost verses

Know that

My heart never meant to welcome closure

Somehow I lost track of the line

Between good and evil

Perhaps, blamable on my lack of faith?

Regardless 

Of how long it may take

I hope you never give up on me

As I never gave up on you

As I never gave up on loving you

As I never gave up on believing your hopeful verses

If countless lives are lost

I hope you'll forgive me

I hope you'll be able to see

That I never wanted to kill

No one but the monster inside of me

The place where I hide

Is made of ice

Ice that once composed the flowing waters

Of the rich mud-less rivers

That once ran my mountainous consciousness

If I ever fall 

To depths unknown to me

On that day

I hope the sky is clear

And the sun strong enough

To light your way towards me

I hope your heart becomes greater than mine

I hope your faith becomes stronger than that sunlight

Strong enough to turn evil humble

I hope you find me.

Reviews

[Devi DM]

This was wonderful to read. The deep meaning and essence behind it. The last few lines especially. Shows growth, compassion and selflessness but with a sense of yearning. Loved it.

[winter;lyra]

Thanks!!! >w

[Mitzie]

If I ever fall
To depths unknown to me
On that day
I hope the sky is clear
And the sun strong enough
To light your way towards me, this is my favourite stanza and it really is a great piece. reads really well out loud.

[winter;lyra]

Thanks!!! >w

[Monica Garcia]

The most incredible element of this piece it the duality that is represented. It's disguised inside of this calm, serene "prayer" in a way. I felt like I was singing a song of my own soul when I read this. Thank you.

[winter;lyra]

awww i actually wrote it thinking of it as a song :)

[ahorseback]

This shows our greatest needs , just those for love and understanding. That we all want . Very nice flow , very descriptive , "I hear you ".

[winter;lyra]

when we fall sometimes we can't climb up, we need someone to lend us a hand :)

[ahorseback]

Well , If you keep writing like this , I would imagine there will be many to help you up . I want to tell you about hubpages ,I also write there and enjoy the rewards of comments . if you haven't heard of it , there are many people who will respond to this kind of writing , as new friends of course ! Keep it up !