Reign Me Above

In the darkness where she lies
I find myself empty
Of all desires

In the darkness where she lies
I kindly reconcile
With my suicidal side

In the darkness where she lies
I bind myself quietly
Within my demise

In the darkness we praised
The false light eluded
Everything our mediocre form concluded

In the darkness we dreamt of
All the dark... we were afraid of
Regardless.. of her claws

In the darkness where she lies
Ruthless and violent is her love
Take me

And reign me above

Reviews

[Anneli Jo]

Well this was really quite beautiful. Excellent job! The one thing that I'd say is that the line, "Of the dark.. we were afraid of" seems a little repetitive using the word "of" twice. But, seriously, everything else was awesome. This was dark, but in a smooth, easy way. I liked it, keep up the good work!

[winter;lyra]

thank you for your review, and also thank you for pointing that out, no matter how inspired i am it seems like i can never bypass the fact that i still need some english classes...not my primary language, but thank you, a lot.

[Anneli Jo]

Wow, well, you have much better grammar than a lot of people who have English as their primary language. You really did do an excellent job, though!

[J3ssInJupit3r]

I really liked the repeticious line "In the darkness where she lies" it kind of gave the poem a mysterious twist on it. The poem had a very dark light to it, which I also really liked because that is my thing too. It was dark, but it wasn't malicious in any way. You did a wonderful job. Thank you for sharing!

[Philip Muls]

Well done, dark and spooky. Intriguing. Reign me above sounds submissive. I would like to understand better.

Well done.