e n d

no egress

from this blackwater moment

 

the ends is here

the end is fear

 

a mountainous hole yawns

where an ocean of faith once lived

&

died

 

died

like everything

does

eventually

 

a man clutches his chest, collapses

a star explodes, implodes, falls asleep

a planet is eaten by the sun that feeds it

a god realizes s/he is the dopeful hope of a dead people

a sweet dream wakes to nightmare reality

a night falls and falls

forever

 

something mortal invented the word “immortal”

something temporary invented the word “infinite”

 

I don’t understand the weight

under which I stand

 

there’s a universe dissolving

on my tiny tongue

 

heaven and hell

are the cracks in my calloused palm

 

and, as I write these gospel lies,

my head is naked,

bleeding out in a hotel bathtub

downtown

 

to weep

perchance

to scream

 

the end is here

the end is fear

the end is

Reviews

[What happened to simple..]

Started off disliking this piece - not your usual style, maybe that was why. But, it's cool - very metaphysical and my goodness those 'gospel lies' you were feeding in there:

'something mortal invented the word “immortal”

something temporary invented the word “infinite”

...something excruciatingly cynical about these thoughts - as though one of deep religion begins to doubt and turns to philosophical formations. True none the less?

[J.M]

Please never change this poem - to me it is perfect as it is. There is so much in it that is beautiful contradiction and it encompasses such poignant contrast that it seems wrong to say the style should be anything other than what it is. For me it is things like 'a mountainous hole yawns
where an ocean of faith once lived
&
died'
that male it perfect.

[freelancejouster]

the repetition doesn't work here as well as it needs to. i feel like you're trying too hard, almost, to make the point that you'd like. the idea, wonderful, but i think there's better execution in you somewhere.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A breath of freh air for me, honestly, it reeks of class and times gone by, a very well written piece, well done, good read.

[Emily B]

it is so good to read you, I'll be by again

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Okay this is awesome... i love it, and love these lines and every line between 'em:
"something mortal invented the word “immortal”
something temporary invented the word “infinite” "
...(all of these lines in between too)
"heaven and hell
are the cracks in my calloused palm"
:D ... just awesome how this is thought out and written. It's different.

[K.C. Zbryk]

This left me speechless. Amazing writing, potent meaning, and an ending that leaves the reader wishing it wasnt the end. Suberb writing.

[The Silver Chord]

This is simply amazing to me. I love the style, keep it up.

[Aggie Skeleton]

Depressing, but certianley descriptive and kept me moving down the page. I liked how you'd break the lines. Like here,

to weep
perchance
to scream

[Kenneth The Poet]

near. Near. The end of awesome.