You describe someone who is totally in love, unashamed to show her joy or delight to someone who makes her heart blossom like a flower. With time, that reflection may disclose a transparent soul, brimming with a bouquet lining the edge of your heart.
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6 Years Ago
Thank you! I am glad to hear that she appears this way. Thanks for checking it out!
Very beautiful, but a word of caution; remember what happened to Narcissus. He fell into sorrow at that pool in which he saw his beauty, and died of that sorrow, for he could not attain the desire of his eyes and heart. He should have forgotten his own beauty and gone with Echo.
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6 Years Ago
Yes, for me, this was not so much an endorsement, but an honest look at a moment in time. Thank you .. read moreYes, for me, this was not so much an endorsement, but an honest look at a moment in time. Thank you for the review!
I love the imagery you use in your poem, but I'm mixed up by pronouns. In lines 3 thru 7, not sure if the narrator is describing his/her own reflection in the other person's eyes . . . or if these lines are meant to be the narrator's impression of how her beloved appears to her. Becuz of your use of "narcissus" (misspelled) in the final line, I get the idea you mean this to be a narrator describing him/herself -- seeing oneself instead of seeing one's lover. This is a great concept & I'm not sure how to make it a little more clear on what you're saying!??!! Narcissist is a person in love with his/her own self. Narcissus is the white flower named as a symbol for such people. (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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6 Years Ago
Thank you for catching my misspelling! I was almost certain that I had made the mistake as I did it!.. read moreThank you for catching my misspelling! I was almost certain that I had made the mistake as I did it! I am referring to the myth related to the flowers name. I think that correction, will make it more clear! Thank you again!
I'm quite visual in my imagining, and this sparks brilliant mental pictures throughout. You mention two of the things I'm always keen to observe, eyes and hands, and although I have no scientific proof, I believe they say important things about a person. On meeting a girl, (It's been eons) eye contact sometimes resulted in holding hands. Yeowee! the memory still is potent.
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6 Years Ago
I also believe that the eyes and hands can tell you a lot about a person. Thank you for the read :)
this is beautiful my first thought was of an older person looking back and seeing a younger self then another version i thought was a person who loves herself a lot (nothing wrong with that acceptance and love of oneselfl helps you love others) great poem love it
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6 Years Ago
I love this interpretation. I agree, nothing wrong with loving one's self. I appreciate your review!.. read moreI love this interpretation. I agree, nothing wrong with loving one's self. I appreciate your review!
6 Years Ago
when we hate ourselves or dont accept ourselves or are bitter to our own self we do the same to othe.. read morewhen we hate ourselves or dont accept ourselves or are bitter to our own self we do the same to others. (like a punishment) i love your poem xx
Windows to the soul they say... I love eyes & spend a great deal of time looking out of mine & into other peoples...
'Her hands reminded you of little birds' is a beautiful line and almost brought tears to mine.... super.. Neville
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6 Years Ago
Thank you! I was worried the little birds bit might be a little strange, so I'm glad to hear you lik.. read moreThank you! I was worried the little birds bit might be a little strange, so I'm glad to hear you liked it!
6 Years Ago
there was a reason you added the little birds.. and yes, I did like it... N
You describe someone who is totally in love, unashamed to show her joy or delight to someone who makes her heart blossom like a flower. With time, that reflection may disclose a transparent soul, brimming with a bouquet lining the edge of your heart.
100/100
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you! I am glad to hear that she appears this way. Thanks for checking it out!
Literature major, teacher, lawyer, mother, constantly trying to avoid sharing anything personal, and then, finding myself feeling completely misunderstood and alone.
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