Birth

When the girl died,
no one was watching her.
No one memorialized her.
Only the baby cried.
No one mourned her for weeks,
and even then, only secretly.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i have an idea as to why no one mourned her for weeks...and then just secretly...
shame can really push us into the shadows...a baby loves its mother no matter what she is or what she has done.
and with each death there is a birth...the cycle of it all.

[Melissa]

Yes, I think with this cycle, when there is death, we mourn and we look for the positive, but when there is birth we celebrate, and we try to hide the negative. Thank you for the read.

[Neville]

a tale told so very well & in so few words... the devil of course is in the detail...

Everyone that now stumbles across these fine words, or are otherwise lured here for and whatever reason, will now be asking Why... What... and How........... artfully done my friend........ Neville

[Melissa]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Neville]

I did.. thank you again....

[¿]

Six lines holding a huge story......
Somewhere I had read sometimes people mourn at someone's birth....as the new soul on earth will go away someday....and at someone's death they become happy in expectations of welcoming another life that'll come soon....and in this way life's cycle keeps resonating.....I guess I've taken your poem totally in another way...but your one is indeed a good short read...thanks for sharing :)

[Melissa]

The cycle of life is rather unconcerned with our own personal plans or expectations. I appreciate your interpretation. Thank you for the read!

[¿]

You're warmly welcome :)

[Chris Shaw]

Cast out in shame, that is what is coming through to me strongly here. A powerful little write which makes you want to know more, especially what happened to the baby? Death and life in a few short lines. Thank you.

Chris

[Melissa]

I really like this interpretation. Thank you :)

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome Melissa

[Relic]

There's sort of a back story to this that seems to be hiding. It has a secret vibe to it that's kind of eerie.

I like it. :)

[Melissa]

Thank you. I like that you got an eerie, secretive vibe from it. There is definitely some back story, that I think I will eventually delve into more.

[Relic]

Sounds good. :)

[Samuel Dickens]

Powerful stuff. I know there's a story to be told, and it could go more than one way.

[Melissa]

Thank you. I really enjoy when things are rooted in truth, but still open to interpretation, so that's really nice feedback to hear.

[wordman]

sad,no one cried for her.............

[Melissa]

TT_TT.....