Day And Night

Just a poem that came to me after creating the first line while playing with the word magnets on the fridge with my 6 year old niece.

The Sunrise is over,
the morning goes by.
The birds fly above us,
while getting around in the sky.
Trees dream together,
dancing softly in the breeze.
Like they are waving hello,
to you and to me.

Stars dot the dark sky,
the moon says "Hi".
It's finally time
for us to head inside.
We all crawl into bed,
and we close our eyes.
We drift away to our dreams,
sleep soundly, goodnight.

Author's Note

Constructive Criticism Only, Please?

Reviews

[Troy Henson]

A simple and cathartic write. Superb imagery, flow and tone made this a pleasure to read.

Regards

[AmandaN]

Simple and smooth a pleasant caressing of ones senses. I like this,thanks :-)

[Meadow Rayne]

Thank You so much!! :)

[AmandaN]

Nope , thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

I like the two color fonts to denote different sections of the day and night. Then the imagery and wording are all good...Gracie Mille...:)

[Meadow Rayne]

Thank you!! Your review is very much appreciated!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)