Silent Warnings

So worn,

I can’t get passed it.

So torn,

But I try to mask it.

Each move,

Could hurt forever,

With a pain,

That’s a greater measure,

Than all I’ve known before.

My soul,

In an early casket.

My life,

In a wicker basket.

Can’t move,

Cause I am fettered.

Like a slave,

I’m bound and tethered.

And I can’t take much more.

But no…

Don’t go.

I can’t let go.

I’m praying,

For a world that stays the same,

For a time that doesn’t change.

So no…

You know,

I can’t let go.

I’m living,

In my head, where I’m secure,

In a past I know for sure.

Confined,

In a lonely bracket.

No choice,

On a lonely ratchet.

My world,

Is about to sever.

I fight to keep,

It all together.

The way it was before.

I hear,

The silent rackets.

Alarms,

Like broken gaskets.

I’m told,

That change is better.

I don’t believe them,

Whatsoever.

I can’t take this anymore.

But no…

Don’t go.

I can’t let go.

I’m praying,

For a world that stays the same,

For a time that doesn’t change.

So no…

You know,

I can’t let go.

I’m living,

In my head, where I’m secure,

In a past I know for sure.

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

Both the broken format and repetition seem to enhance this poem. They seem to help to get across the desperation. I am sure many will identify with this thoughtful poem. Nicely done.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you very much, my friend!

[Jamestown]

Well written and expressed!
Many have a hard time with change,
I can relate to an extent, really enjoyed reading this piece:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for reading an reviewing, my friend! I'm sorry for the late reply!

[Heather]

I relate to this so much, I hate change, and would most certainly rather be alive alone with my own mind than in the presence of someone else. I love this, a great write :)

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you can relate! I'm sorry for the late reply!

[Lotus Flower]

With most things I also would like to keep a systematic approach, this portrayed how I felt exactly! Your writing is always like a breath of fresh air my friend

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you, Lotus Flower! I'm sorry for the late reply!

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Very powerful words that were configured into a beautiful poem. Made me think of how I also want the world just to stay the same and have the past to grasp onto forever.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lauren!

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Your very welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

A emotional ride in your words.
"I’m praying,
For a world that stays the same,
For a time that doesn’t change."
Life can be scary. We must go forward and be fearless. Thank you for sharing the powerful poetry. You left a lot for the reader to think about.
Coyote

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you as always, Coyote, for stopping by and reading and for your nice reviews.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Ashley]

Such feels! I think we all want to hang on to some part of our past and have conflicts with what is going on inside of our heads. Such great and raw writing. Thank you for sharing : )

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for reading and for the great review, Ashley!

[PaintedBirdy]

this is a great poem! i even like how it looks visually. although this could be read metaphorically to fit many situations, i can't help but read it literally. i feel like the narrator really could be in pain for the rest of his mortal life if he moves , and that imagery makes me think of a hospital bed (in a bracket) with a "wicker basket" full of meaningful mementos of his life, like photos and stuff.

the verse in the middle is appealing to look at and read in the sense that it seems like the narrator is centering himself with these thoughts. it's really interesting to read "i'm praying for a world that stays the same" because there's nothing at all in the world that we can point to and say "that'll never change." we just don't get that as humans, everything in the world changes, and i think that's a huge issue many people struggle with. i find it interesting here because the narrator says "pray" and usually the thing people pray to is the solution to living in a world of impermanence (meaning god is usually viewed as eternal, whereas nothing else is). so, to manage life the narrator is grasping at memories "in my head" and "in the past" because they feel like the only permanent things in the world, which again makes me think there's photos next to him too.

i really like this poem. it speaks to me in a pretty real and human way. good job!!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Wow! Thank you for the amazing review, my friend! I love your insights and your take on my writing! Thank you for taking the time out to read my work and review it with such a great dissection! I really appreciate it!

[Clara Kevie]

I like the concept around which this is built, that time in the past one clings to and wishes could last forever. The repeated chorus being centered is interesting in that it's different and moves the eye around—which is great—but a couple notes on the format—is there a deeper meaning behind the unusual spacing? I'd like to know the significance behind it. Also was comic sans a purposeful choice? Personally, I found it distracting. I'd like to know your reasoning behind these formatting choices. :) I enjoyed the first two stanzas the most. I found the visual of the basket/casket especially powerful.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for the amazing review, Clara! The spacing was put in place to emphasize the rhythm of the poem. And I didn't choose comic sans on purpose, it's just the font I always use up here. Thank you for taking such an interest in my writing, though!

[Amber Lily]

It is hard to expect change, especially when you believe it will affect you negatively. This poem radiates with the desire to cling onto the present, and constant fear of change. Sometimes we don't want to move on, because where we are now feels too nice. A great poem Michael, great to see you back at it :)

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you so much, Amber! Thank you for all your kind words and insights into my writing!