This is great, my favourite stanza is the third one, it reeks of innocence and hope, the idea that most times and feeling aren't permanent. It's truly lovely, I thoroughly enjoyed it :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much, my new friend! Your words are very kind :)
I am getting the idea of Epic Simplicity. This I like -- it has a very natural flow to it. I know you don't know me, and I hope you are one who appreciates constructive criticism. The very first lay should be lie -- you can claim poetic license, for sure, but grammatically speaking "lie" is the proper term (Let me lie here) -- for simple tips on such thing, Grammar Girl is a useful page. http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/lay-versus-lie Again, pardon me if that's not what you want to hear. But I don't like to let good writing be unintentionally encumbered by minor errors.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Wow, thanks for the great review! I welcome the advice. Thank you for helping me and taking the time.. read moreWow, thanks for the great review! I welcome the advice. Thank you for helping me and taking the time to read my work.
8 Years Ago
And I'm more than happy to hear you say you get my motif of epic simplicity!
Beautiful and flawless writing.. I really admire the change of pace in the middle. Can't wait to read more from you!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Wow! Thank you very much, Etta! I appreciate your kind words! And don't worry, there will be a lot m.. read moreWow! Thank you very much, Etta! I appreciate your kind words! And don't worry, there will be a lot more coming!
Such a growing voice of love.. of longing.. not just a desire for a moment.. but a lifetime.. And no matter what is happening outside.. love is the strongest shield...
Beautiful, heart-wrenching, great language...This poem is a big score. Nice work. The entire piece kept me reading to the very end. I like the lyrical feel. Good job!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Aarea! I always appreciate your very kind reviews! I am so sorry for the late rep.. read moreThank you so much, Aarea! I always appreciate your very kind reviews! I am so sorry for the late reply but I've been away for a while!
I love this so much, Michael. This is a great lyrical piece.
Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Keep it up!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Wow! Thank you very much, my friend! I am so sorry for the late reply but I've been away for a while.. read moreWow! Thank you very much, my friend! I am so sorry for the late reply but I've been away for a while!
My first poetry book, "Half-Hour Silence" can be checked out here on Amazon:
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