More Questions for God

Unexpected.

I don't get it.

I've never,
Felt so cold before.

It flows through my veins.

Like vicious pain.

I always thought,
That I had more.

And why,
Can't I die,
Before my time?
Maybe it would ease my mind.

And I,
Try to lie,
But don't you know - 
That I don't really want to go?

Will this last?

Or will this pass?

Will I ever be the same,
Just like before?

A simple plea.

Do you hear me - 

When I scream,
That I can't take this anymore?

And why,
Can't I die,
Before my time?
Maybe it would ease my mind.

And I,
Try to lie,
But don't you know - 
That I don't really want to go?

One day,
I'll pray,
And you'll say,
I'll be okay.

But is this all my fault?

Until,
You will,
I'll be still.

But is this all my fault?

Just let me know,
Because I don't really want to go.

Reviews

[Calissa Knox]

Absolutely beautiful write. I can really relate to this one ~ thanks for sharing!

[Talfox]

I'm pretty late but

noice :)

[PaintedBirdy]

hey Michael! i really like this poem. my interpretation of it is as a plea from someone who is suffering on their deathbed or has a terminal illness, because "unexpected" and "never felt so cold" sounds like the body is shutting down and it's a painful death, and the narrator wants to get it over with if death is approaching but at the same time wishes to stay alive longer, bargaining for more time. i like it, good job!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Wow! Thank you for the awesome review! I love your take on this. Thank you for taking the time to dissect my work.

[Philip Muls]

Anticipating death like Socrates did, the Stoics said look death in the eye, be prepared than it will not surprise you. Pre-empting death so it eases your mind from the terror.

That is what I get from this.

Could you review some of mine, I would appreciate feedback.

[Krisna Chatelain]

Alan Watts thoughts on death: "Now there really isn’t anything radically wrong with being sick or with dying. Who said you’re supposed to survive? Who gave you the idea that it’s a gas to go on and on and on?"

I say you only fear the unknown. People are afraid of death because they dont know what awaits them. and when you say " and why can't i die, before my time? maybe it would ease my mind." i can assure you i've asked myself the same question.

This gave me literal thoughts. Bravo

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Wow! Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! Your insights and words of Alan Watts really gave me something to think about!

[613]

This was written very well. I feel we all ask these questions from time to time. It's just apart of life. But G-d certainly hears everything. (: Well done!

- Brittney

P.S. Would you mind checking out my novel, HIM? Before sending it off for publishing, I'd love it if I could have as much constructive criticism as possible. (:

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you very much, Brittney! I will certainly take a look at your novel!

[613]

You're welcome. & thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

Somethings we will never understand. Life leave us with open windows for opportunity. I tell people. Take the good road. Always a better ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you, Coyote! It's always great to hear from a writer as talented as yourself! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Always a pleasure to read your words and thoughts and you are welcome.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This is very touching and I can relate much. We all pass this stage when we have doubts and we need to hold on to something to believe in.
God is always at work...

Great piece!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you Dhaye! I'm really sorry for the late reply! I always really appreciate your support! :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Always my pleasure, Michael.

[Cryingkate]

Wow Michael, I think we all have been there a few times but really.... amazing how you put it all down in rhythm and Words.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you CryingKate! I always appreciate you taking the time to read my work! :)

[Cryingkate]

You've been on my mind lately.. I hope all is well . Glad to hear from you.
You are a good writer Michael. Visting your works a pleasure.
I'll be back more after I get my fall chores done.
Drop me a line once and a while, I have a habit of putting so many people on the back burner, cause I can't keep up. I don't mean to it just happens that way.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Wow! Thank you! Will do! You're an amazing writer as well!

[Cryingkate]

thanks for the giggle :-)

[Ashley Griffiths]

This is a powerful piece that conjures up images of both internal and external conflicts. As I read I found myself questioning what the conflict was. Great words!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, Ashley! :)