Eternal

A piece for two people out on a first date and each desperately wants the other to make a move but each is too afraid to.

The love of a lifetime,

Starts with a first time.

And I'm feeling so out of line,

But I think I'm doing fine.

You talk with perfect rhythm,

And I'm looking like I'll listen,

But I'm just staring at the vision,

Of your perfect indecision.

And I wait,

With fears,

That feel so good.

I'd touch, 

You now,

But I doubt I should.

And so much, 

Waits,

If only I could.

I really want to,

Because I really want you.

And I can't beg, 

Or ask out loud,

But would you do this now?

Would you hold my hand,

And not let go?

Would you pull me close,

And kiss me slow?

It's so hard to show.

But I really hope you know.

God, this takes forever.

I try with all my might,

To say things that excite.

And it might take all night,

But I'll get the mood just right.

The risk is way too high,

To look into your eyes.

But I won't let the night go by,

Without giving it a try.

And you sit,

So crossed - 

You're on your guard.

I search,

Like a thief,

For just some regard.

And I'd touch,

You now,

But it's so hard.

I really want to,

Because I really want you.

And I can't beg, 

Or ask out loud,

But would you do this now?

Would you hold my hand,

And not let go?

Would you pull me close,

And kiss me slow?

It's so hard to show.

But I really hope you know.

God, this takes forever,

And ever.

I want to be with you forever.

We'll remember this forever,

And ever.

I want to be with you forever.

So let's make this last forever,

And ever.

Because I want to be with you forever.

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

Wow Micheal, it's just an immeasurably wonderful piece full of innocence, truth, desire and love... I really love reading poems of this type. You are a great writer who makes me feel great with every piece of writing... All the rhymes you have put in here sound perfect to me... The repeating lines make the poem like more shine in the gems....I would like to know if it was a real experience of yours or just a piece of imagination, that seems incredibly beautiful....
Anindita : )

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Wow! Thank you for the amazing review, Anindita! Your words are very encouraging. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was inspired a little by a real experience but I developed it with a lot of imagination.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Yes that's what I liked in you.. The imagination of creating emotions... I too try hard for that but finally end up with some real experience in such cases.. But I never wrote like this emotional piece out of imagination... great job of yours... keep writing .. also most welcome...

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you, once again Anindita! Your words are too kind!

[one sky]

This is divinely beautiful. Only few believe that love could stay forever.
You have talent in creating powerful lines, be it poem or song lyrics. Keep up the good work.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you very much, my friend!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. I been in this place.
"o let's make this last forever,
And ever.
Because I want to be with you forever."
Good to be holding on tight and hoping for the days never to end. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry for love.
Coyote

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you, Coyote!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Cryingkate]

Poem? More like a song to me and a good one at that !
Great Job love what you did here.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you so much, Cryingkate! :)

[Cryingkate]

No I thank you :-)

[Lotus Flower]

This is a tempting piece, love you you show your internal conflict!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you very much, my friend! :)

[Wandering Minstrel]

This is captivating and just beautiful

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you as always for all of your support and inspiration! :)

[Amber Lily]

So adorable! This really shows how difficult it is to restrain yourself when you have been struck with love at first sight. Even on the first date resisting urges seems impossible, but getting there is all the fun! Beautifully written :)

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you so much, Amber! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is a moment so often experienced...my solution....just hug and kiss immediately and get that out of the way...then the rest of the night can be devoted to actually listening and hearing to what each other is saying.

cool poem....

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Cool solution, Jacob. Can't say I don't agree. I always appreciate your reviews!

[Natalie Dieudonne]

I really love your style of writing! Its like you tell a poetic story yet it could also be lyrics to a song.

The risk is way too high,
To look into your eyes.
But I won't let the night go by,
Without giving it a try.

My favorite stanza. This is definitely going into my favorites :)

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Wow! Thank you very much, Natalie! I appreciate all of your kind words! :)