Surrender

I don't know for sure,

But I'd like to say,

That my hope is secure,

That love finds a way.

So don't wait.

Just take me.

Before it's too late.

I never found my way.

Like a leaf in a stream,

I live so astray.

I'm lost in a dream.

So please stay.

Just a while.

So I can see you smile.

I've always been alone.

And I've learned to deal.

But now, on my own,

You're all I feel.

So don't wait.

Just take me.

Before it's too late.

I watch for your glow,

And the warmth that it brings.

Then I melt like snow,

On the first eve of Spring.

So please stay.

Just a while.

So I can see you smile.

I love you more than you know.

And I couldn't lie.

I couldn't let you go.

Even if I tried.

So take me.

As your anything.

Because you're my everything.

Reviews

[mou]

ohh it is so close to my heart also..the metaphor is quite beautiful..so gentle and beautiful write

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for the review!

[Nisreen]

Well
What a pure message of noble emotion towards a person you value .....
And true love only means to place this person you admire in the highest place you know of
Very endearing

[PhoenixDown]

This is very beautiful, my new friend. Your consistency, attention to detail, & the simple, clear emotion this leaves me with are reasons I find you as a writer, as well as this piece, very respectable. Your compliments & kind words mean even more now (I hope I can say that without coming across as rude).
Excellent.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Wow! Thank you so much, PhoenixDown! I can't describe how much your review and compliments mean to me.

[Aarea]

Your poem is beautiful and rhythmic, almost like a song I would like to hear. You can relate to everything in this poem and your word choice creates a feel that is wonderfully soothing. Well done.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you so much, Aarea! I'm so sorry for not seeing this great review sooner! Please forgive me. I always appreciate your kind words.

[Michael Stevens]

Very poignant poem--I think we can all relate to this one.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, my friend!

[Michael Stevens]

You're quite welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful gentle journey into love in your words.
"So please stay.
Just a while.
So I can see you smile."
I do understand the reward of a smile and a love near. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank You very much, Coyote! I always appreciate you stopping by!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Awakened Rose]

this touched my heart :) SO beautiful. You can really feel your emotions behind this piece. I enjoyed this very much, thank you for sharing! :)

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for the amazing review! I'm sorry for the late comment! I really appreciate it though! :)

[Amber Lily]

The wait is always the hardest part, but so worth it in the end. This has a great flow and a lot of meaning :)

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you, Amber! :)

[Natalie Dieudonne]

So don't wait.
Just take me.
Before it's too late.

I love that you repeat this stanza! This is such a sweet piece. Nicely penned!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, my friend! :)

[Stefanie Holmes]

The flow of this piece really drew my attention in. As others have already said... you really do have a way with words. :)

~Stefanie

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you so much, Stefanie! :)