Even If She's True

And she was...

Like an evening glow...

Like the whitest night...

Full of ice-cold snow... 

And a frost-filled bite...

Never on her own...

But always all alone.

Turn away-

You know you can't stay.

She'll leave you this way-

Even if she wants you now.

Try to refrain-

When she's calling your name.

She'll drive you insane-

Even if she wants you now.

And she was...

Like a wolverine...

Like an endless spiral... 

Full of dizzy dreams...

And a touch so fatal...

Always sharp and keen...

And always so damn mean.

Too much pressure-

You should've known better.

You'll never get her-

Even if she wants you now.

Try and see-

She's making you crazy.

She'll keep telling you maybe-

Even if she wants you now.

And she was...

Like a pack of fighting wolves...

Like a nightmare angel...

Straight from Catholic School...

And so soft and painful...

Always fierce and cruel...

But always beautiful.

Turn away-

You know you can't stay.

She'll leave you this way-

Even if she wants you now.

Try to refrain-

When she's calling your name.

She'll drive you insane-

Even if she wants you now.

Too much pressure-

You should've known better.

You'll never get her-

Even if she wants you now.

Try and see-

She's making you crazy.

She'll keep telling you maybe-

Even if she wants you now.

Reviews

[Shawn Leere]

I like it. It made me think of the lyrics for a soft rock style song. Very good.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Shawn!

[Audrey Kanyera]

I love your writing. I relate to this as a girl. Beautiful girls may show you that they love you but they may not stay forever because they are looking for something better.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Haha so true! Thank you for reading and for the kind words!

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing tale. Type of poetry needed to be read more than once.
"And she was...
Like a wolverine...
Like an endless spiral...
Full of dizzy dreams...
And a touch so fatal..."
Many good visions create by the poem. The above lines were my favorite. Left the reader with wild places and thoughts. I like the perfect ending. Sort of a question. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you very much for visiting, reading, and reviewing Coyote! Your words are very inspiring.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I love the road trip into your words.

[Cryingkate]

same quality and still scaring me :-)

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you! Again, I hope it's in a good way haha :)

[Cryingkate]

Again.... I hope so too. After reading these writes I sure wouldn't meet you anywhere for coffee :-)
I assume these writes will probably go into a book for the criminally insane? I hope this isn't an autobiography LOL

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Don't worry, it's not an autobiography.

[Cryingkate]

That's very good to know :-) You're very talented Micheal

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you Kate :)

[Spacecadet]

So lyrical and beautiful. If this was a song, I'd listen on repeat :) Love the way the words flow!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you so much for reading and for your great review!

[BelleMell]

Fantastic writing. I couldn't help but admit to myself as I read, that as a woman I've acted similar. Us girls are tricky sometimes.
You set up the poetry very well and did great rhyming which allowed the words to flow easily in my mind. Overall, great job!
-BelleMell

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Wow! Thank you so much, my friend!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i was reading this again...ah catholic school girls...yes i want you , stay away, i want you, stay away.

i was around 20 when i started writing full force..before that a tidbit or two..and it was what kept me sane also...

love this piece...one suggestion, very slight...for rhythm and smoothness sake...last line first stanza...i would leave out the "all"--try it without it..says the same but a bit smoother.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

thank you for the second review jacob. yep thats how catholic school girls are. they kill us.

Thanks for the suggestion - I'll keep it in mind

[Sami Khalil]

"And she was...

Like an evening glow...

Like the whitest night...

Full of ice-cold snow...

And a frost-filled bite...


Never on her own...

But always all alone."

[Dhaye]

There's a love to be kept
And one to be left

But if the love is pure
Would you have to ignore?

When it knocks on your door
Don't let it beg like a poor

Perhaps fear is what you feel
You can't stand for what is real

Never play with someone's heart
That would turn your world apart.


Michael, you have a good choice of words here. Nice lyrics.
Though I'm not that too feminist, the lines clearly show how you "throw stones" to that person though there's a possibility that you're right. Possibility..that means, it is also possible that you see it in the wrong way. It's really difficult to love when there's fear...and sometime because of it, we tend to make "sour grapes".
I once did it...

This is a nice lyrical piece though. Keep writing!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you Dhaye! Is that one of your poems you wrote here? I like it

[Dhaye]

It's a poem in this review only. You're welcome, Michael.