A Celestial Visit

This is the first poem of my "Mary's Story," as I call it, a poetic diary of Mary. Somewhat biblical, definitely not theological. enjoy!

Hark! the Herald Angel!

who brings

a message of peace

a hint of a plan

a blessing from God

yet

leaves me

 “deeply troubled.”

 

Hark! the Herald Angel!

who offers

a holy proposal

a baby, a kingdom,

a light for the world

and

grants me

the final say

 

Hark! the Herald Angel!

who departs

my time is at hand

God’s power is rested

Spirit enfolds

thus,

my story

begins

Author's Note

I have changed the whole poem. Please let me know what you think. It's the first poem in the collection of poems of how Mary experiences the "salvation" story

Reviews

[Distant horizons]

Well, as you know i "dont do religion", but it doesnt mean i totally disregard religion or have contempt for it, i just don't have that in me to have that amount of belief. so, what about a little more comment and a little less rambling i hear you say...
I see the beauty and wonder of your write, the knowing of a decision that will be life changing and almost too much for one person to decide. if you look at this from another view, this is about all of us. we all have these impossible decisions to make throughout our lives and they build us into who we all become, the same as mary.
Whatever way you read this, there is hope in there for all to see, and being positive about life is never a bad thing.
I really enjoyed this and wont be offended if my ramble is deleted. :-)
Great write.

[Mary]

hello distant, I just saw your review and I thank you for it! My "mary" poems are not about preaching any kind of gospel, but I believe the person of mary is a kind of archetype of "everywoman," at least that is how I try to represent her in my poems. I especially welcome reviews from those who don't "do" religion, because your reviews keep me on track. again, thank you!

[steppenwolf]

Here I am again. I love the Annunciation, the story and the way it's been portrayed in paintings. The poem's nice and short because I guess that's how it must have been--yes or no. I love the last part--ending the poem with her story beginning.

[Jibey]

A simple working out of the core thoughts of the young woman...aware of the significance of her pregnancy and conscious that she cannot turn back...

[Ahmad Cox]

Very wonderful retelling of the beginning of everything.

[Jo March]

I love how this shows that Mary could been confused, perturbed and yet still trusting in God. And how you show that her life truly began when she became the mother of Jesus, without the will of God, she'd have been nothing.

A beautiful poem

[Mary]

thank you for your thoughtful review.

[RachelReaper]

As an opening, its very pretty and a great way to unfold the journey of Mary. :)

[FJ Davis]

This bit of work is lovely in every way.
Thank you, Mary.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Your poems are unique and also important in my opinion. Awareness is always good and these certainly will reach many that otherwise might miss out. I say good job!

[Leslie Philibert]

Another good poem from Mary, well written with a consistent well thought theme,good writing.Mary works very carefully on the subject of religion, is artistically consistent.

[Marie]

What choice had Mary other than Consent? God had decided.