I'm not suicidal, it's my other Personality I worry about.. He wants to kill me!

One of the small plusses of losing my work- I am forced to reread and edit. I think this version conveys much more of my vision.

Immune,
But feel the pain of existence

Forgetful,
But yearn for the joy of hope

Berated,
By the ceaseless demons

Castrated,
But thrusting up an impotent hand

Cast out,
Yet shunned by the leprous legions

Judged,
Through thickets and brambles..

Intolerant,
To the angst of my epoch.

Questioning,
"Right? Why does it matter?"

" Wrong? Why fight the guilt? 

Unassailable,

Logically, and horrifically

 

The expiry:

An outer urge

from my inner voice is chanting.

 

"Continue??"
"Why?"

© 2006 Randy Mckenica -re-emerging from the cave
edited 2008

Reviews

[ℰmerald ⚓]

I love the title and the writing itself, I've read it 3 times and it sounds better every time. Your play with words was amazing, lovely, just fantastic write. Great job.

[Celtic Cat]

I didn't see the first version...but I am loving this piece. Of course that ingenius title drew me in....and then your words held me in place. It's resonating in my heart....because I know of these feelings all too well. You have done a wonderful job laying out these thoughts....these anchors....these bombs. It's heart-wrenching. Great work!!!