One Wish Granted

Oh how I wish... and while you’re at it, knock about 30 years off the calendar :)

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Entranced through castle window
arms outstretched ...
but resting on its frame
The only sound that falls to ear
from a pendulum's rhythmic swing
~
A gentle flame
sends ghostly shadows
that dance to silent notes
Entwined in scents from fireside
inlaid with cherry smoke
~
They said she would appear this night
as all the stars align
I drank their potion
said the chant
Still dispirited
counting time
~
The hour's close
near darkest night
a looking glass beside me
hand crafted by the little folk
ornate with sprigs of ivy
~
Enchanted ... yes ... they cannot lie
my wish they guarantee
Their word's been kept
since dawning time
One minute more ...
we'll see
~
A deafening thunder breaks the still
as lightning strikes the spires
From gentle breeze
to baleful gale
Dare never
to think them liars
~
The ancient mirror begins to glow
as the clock counts off the trials
My heart explodes
beneath my chest
with the force of a billion smiles
~
" Take my hand ...
while the clock still strikes "
your voice pleads ... from inside
To my surprise
I reach within
with both arms open wide
~
Your loving touch
and I'm pulled through time
to your kiss
oh ... sweet embrace
A whirling swirling rainbow ride
as the tears roll down my face
~
" To the end of time ... I beg of you
Never leave these loving arms "
"Ohh...
but there's one more task
you must fulfil
if you wish to win my charms "
~
With sprawling thud ... I hit the grass
spinning senses in a daze
A newborn sunlight
warms my face
sparkling air
helps lift the haze
~
Such marvels
cast
in this wondrous world
~
A voice sings out
with a smile
~
... " You must catch me " ...
rings your taunting laugh
from a glade
nearly half a mile
~~~

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'One Wish Granted'
McEltic,
How many times have we all dreamed or should I say day day dreamed? It can seem so real this walk into our imaginations. Where our hopes, our desires, our thoughts live. I found your poem a walk into this inner world, an honest place where a wish comes true. But anything good can be challenging too, hence;
..."YOu must catch me"...
rings your taunting laugh
from a glade
nearly half a mile"
This was a fun walk with you into another place.
Blessings,
Kathy
'

[barleygirl]

Amazingly imaginative! You took me on a multi-faceted journey laced heavily with longing & anticipation! There wasn't one thing about this message that felt familiar -- I was constantly wondering where it was going. Unlike most fantasies memorialized into poems, your "wish" is original & playful & unexpected! In a longer poem such as this, it's great to have the tension played with, going in various directions! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[The Iron Horseman]

This is terrific, Mac! It lilts along softly off the tongue while telling a tale of enchantment and lost love. It is hauntingly beautiful, erudite and touching. I love story poems and this is a superb example of the breed. Well done.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Made me think of Cinderella for some reason- the beauty of enchantment and followingbthat unknown dream believing and waiting for the handsome prince to arrive with the glass slipper- joyous and innocent upon a carefree heart- I felt the air as the flight went through the air - wonderful words - love light and happiness🌹