Blue Eyes Dreaming

~~~
Not far it was from Heaven
'twas the very month of June
and the sweetest birds were singing
when first
she stole my tune ...
As if from out the bluest sky
an angel came to call

Quintessent of Irish memory
with braids as I recall
The golden sun shone o'er the dew
reflecting
through her eyes

Like flowers
from a woodland path
her smile just mesmerized

With dancer's wings she stepped along
my song held in her arms

My blue eyes dreaming
hypnotized
now locked within her charms
"Good day kind sir"
sweet melody
embraced my very soul

With butterflies and rubber thighs
my tongue
I swear it swoll

My heart stood tall
to brace my jaw
an lock the molars tight

The best I managed
was a smile
my voice had taken flight
Pausing
she locked her gaze to mine
reached out to my lapel

Placed a fragrant flower there
bent close
to share its smell

The moment
stole my breath away

I gazed in pure delight

Enchanted with her beauty rare
awoke
to silent night
~~~

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Blue Eyes Dreaming'
McEltic,
Yes, this has a lilting rather Irish flair like it should be set to the tune of a reel or a jig.
Sweet onward process of discovery is seen from meeting and acknowledgement between you two.
"She locked her gaze to mine'reached out to my lapel
Placed a fragrant flower there
bent close
to share it's smell."
Such a darling word picture!
Blessings,
Kathy

[barleygirl]

This is a playful description of being awestruck, full of vivid details & uninhibited confessions. In the first half, I'm reminded of a more traditional or lyrical style of verse, but then the pacing & expressions seem to become a little more frenetic as the poem goes along, such that the elegant style at the beginning turns into a more realistic & down-to-earth (urgent) style going toward the end. All in all, nicely told feelings very palpable to the reader (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[emipoemi]

fluid - profound - divine! need I say more! Well done!

[McEltic]

Thank you emipoemi... your kind words are much appreciated:)

[emipoemi]

My pleasure.

[Cherrie Palmer]

this poem, just like the last has a easy rhyme, a very satisfying read. Loved the ending.

[McEltic]

Thank you Cherrie... I like to write lighthearted pieces and I enjoy the challenge of rhyme :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A most distinctive piece that rally's the senses and mind.

[McEltic]

Thank you Thomas, glad you enjoyed

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Isn’t that jaw clenching just the most agonising form of control- your words captivating- I could see each inch of scene being played out wonderful- and her aroma as well I smelt as she leaned in closer to you- wonderful words🌹

[McEltic]

Yes it surely keeps one on the edge of our heart attack