I wrote this in History class so it may not be really good. I just wrote it because I was so bored so I'm not sure if I should continue it. Give me your opinions. Comments are encouraged. Thanks for reading ^^
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This seems really good! It's a slightly rough around the edges but it has a lot of potential! I'm excited for you to add more!
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thanks :) I'm writing this with Silent Wolf so she will be writing the next chapter. I'm not sure wh.. read moreThanks :) I'm writing this with Silent Wolf so she will be writing the next chapter. I'm not sure when the next chapter is coming out but when it does I can message you, if you would like me too.
I think you have a bud here from which to bloom. While your English and grammar needs to be corrected in some areas, overall the writing is very good. I was fully engaged in the story up to the point of Jason entering the principal's office. From there, your story kind of falls apart, as you have not delineated her character quite enough. Writing like this needs to be done in quiet, away from any distractions, and most definitely not in a history class. LOL! It's good that it inspired you, but it's up to you to take that inspiration and produce something fruitful.
Thanks :) I know it needs some work. I only wrote up to where Jason enters the principals in history.. read moreThanks :) I know it needs some work. I only wrote up to where Jason enters the principals in history. The rest I wrote late last night so I was very tired.
10 Years Ago
I understand the desire to want to finish something to the point where you are utterly exhausted fro.. read moreI understand the desire to want to finish something to the point where you are utterly exhausted from the effort. At those times, I have to force myself to put my pen down and walk away and go to sleep if need be. It's a hard lesson to learn, to not push yourself past the point of no return. :-) Good luck to you.
Interesting. I would honestly like to read more. :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Really?! So should I continue it? If I continue it though how should I continue it? I didn't think o.. read moreReally?! So should I continue it? If I continue it though how should I continue it? I didn't think of any ideas. Haha lol
Alright, and I could help you. :) It'd be almost like a co-write. ^-^
10 Years Ago
Yea ^^ actually if you want you can write the next chapter. Then I could write the next chapter and .. read moreYea ^^ actually if you want you can write the next chapter. Then I could write the next chapter and so on.
It seems to become very interesting and a nice way to bring the characters in. I like it, only problem is that I wanted to make a thief story as well, but if I write one it'll seem like I stole it from you >.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Haha sorry. What was it going to be about? If you don't want to say it on here then you can message .. read moreHaha sorry. What was it going to be about? If you don't want to say it on here then you can message meprprivately. ^^ And I'm also not sure if I should continue this one.
10 Years Ago
It's also about a master thief. He steals the heart of a girl, but then that girl is taken from him... read moreIt's also about a master thief. He steals the heart of a girl, but then that girl is taken from him. He takes up his heritage as a mage and uses magic to try to steal her back ^^
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