This... was... INCREDIBLE!!!! I am in love with how you made your love for the guitar so real. You made it so human - yet music is so human, isn't it? I found it incredibly interesting how most poets who write analogize humans to music but in this case you did the opposite, and boy did it work. Amazing, amazing, amazing!
This... was... INCREDIBLE!!!! I am in love with how you made your love for the guitar so real. You made it so human - yet music is so human, isn't it? I found it incredibly interesting how most poets who write analogize humans to music but in this case you did the opposite, and boy did it work. Amazing, amazing, amazing!
What a nice, sensuous piece of writing. You've done well here to convey the playing of any finely tuned instrument. Well written and nicely done with the world choice. I like the simple section with
"She frees me
She knows me
She wants me
She has me'
That is very well done and very simplistic.
the one suggestion I do have is to take away the "u" in the second sentence and put in "you" simply because to abbreviate takes away the class and presentation form this piece.
Its not wrong it is you and it tells a beauties tale of wandering lust for the kind love of music To relate music and love is as old as man .The difference is you have the control of the whole xperiance
haha, great note! I should use that some time >.> Really though, that's a great point.
To me, I can't really see anything wrong with it.
It's raw and pure, and that way it is perfect as it is.
You've no idea how much I enjoyed reading this :]
Great job!
Starlight, I is just a lovely homage to your wonderful guitar.
It's has a sensual quality that most guitars and instruments
have when you play them. Love the lines re: strum sounds
that resonate thru every nerve.. The lines describing your
guitar as a human form and the last stanza: "how fast your heart"
down to "And forever my Starlight" that expresses a deep loving
relationship with your guitar..
Kudos, MR!
LLR