If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

 

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

 

You think I'm digging my grave,

but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

 

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down

and let me breathe.

 

Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days.

 

This is it.
You've got nothing left to lose.

 

S**t.

 

If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.

Author's Note

Thank you all so much for your wonderful feedback. :)

Reviews

[Shannon]

I may come off as slightly sadistic in saying this, but i absolutely ADORE this piece. The force of each line, the power behind it is never rackingly beautiful, and the jarring flow just makes it all the more mind boggling.

What i find very interesting is the vulgarity. The piece is formed around it almost, but does not concentrate on it. Almost like each word spits its own little insult in competition with the actual curses lol.

Kudos to you my friend for this stunning piece!

[Numb]

I love how some is bolded and some isn't. It was kinda like organized chaos, ending with a smack in the face ^^ The ending made me laugh a little, I couldn't help it :D
I loved it, truly I did.

~N~

[Dream Weaver]

Wow! This one bloodied my nose and I'm down
for the count. Such controlled hostility with a
hint of chaotic charm. All I kept visualizing was
opening up a can of Whoop A*s! Beautifully
angry write. Nicely Done!

[Angel's Lady]

haha It made me chuckle; I'm sorry. Those last few lines....If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed. haha I wrote something like this years ago. And it felt good to let it flow....

[MusicMartyrs]

i cant think of anything that hasn't already been said...
i f*****g love this! :D
100/100

[Dom]

Absolutely loved it! What an amazing poem that you have written. Great job! :D

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This is so very sharp and hard hitting..well love can be this way too..and somehow the darker aspects are more enjoyable.

[Abdul Aziz]

Stunning. Literally.

This was as hard-hitting as hitting hard can get!

Very well written angst. Loved the poem.

[The Tea Party Mouse.]

Oh, the love of a sociopath. O.o Very scary as there truely are people like that out there running loose, preying on people's feelings.