If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

 

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

 

You think I'm digging my grave,

but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

 

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down

and let me breathe.

 

Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days.

 

This is it.
You've got nothing left to lose.

 

S**t.

 

If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.

Author's Note

Thank you all so much for your wonderful feedback. :)

Reviews

[Shannon]

I may come off as slightly sadistic in saying this, but i absolutely ADORE this piece. The force of each line, the power behind it is never rackingly beautiful, and the jarring flow just makes it all the more mind boggling.

What i find very interesting is the vulgarity. The piece is formed around it almost, but does not concentrate on it. Almost like each word spits its own little insult in competition with the actual curses lol.

Kudos to you my friend for this stunning piece!

[Winters_Lost_Walk]

Woww, this is harsh...I love it, it shows passion in anger..It's really amazing =)

[Rikkevi Rue]

f****n is more casual that f*****g, which is kind of formal in its way. so f****n to me infers LESS concern about the feelings/viewpoints/attitudes/ etc of the recipient. The beauty of this work to me is that it trashes all the socially acceptable (and totally hypocritical) "now you're supposed to's" by unrestrained and even joyous insult. It reverses and breaks all those years of being told by parents and authorities "be polite" "mind your manners" etc etc. And given the utterly FALSE reality of these pious platitudes your piece rings of truth, or at least something we all can at least feel it HONEST!

[Nobody.]

Good flow, blunt truths...best title ever. I really enjoyed this.
cheers!

[H-Jonesy]

I love this, with a passion in fact. The slight sadistic mood it gives off, along with the whole "I dont give a f**k" attitude is great. Each line seems to have a certain amount of power to it. BUT its not like each line is saying "F**k you!"


"Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days."

That stanza is ammmaaazziiinnnggg (yes my voice got al high pitched)
This write is great, love it till the end. I will definitly be looking out for your work my friend.-

Harmony

[Anna]

This is very different I myself would never think to write with words such as s**t or f*****g it made this piece so different in a wonderful way. I could feel the anger behind your words and the forcefulness you did a great job.

[Alicia Schroeder]

I think f****n would be slang, not sure really, but awesome angry write..

[An owl on the moon]

You create the powerful sense of a voice inside one's head screaming out, surrounded by the darkened world of love in all its pain. Here is a passionately gripping imagery, filled with emotion.. and that feeling that life is rapidly falling apart. So glad to be back by...

[Aven]

I'm loving the format here, it enhances the potency of the poem in a remarkable way.

[Dupree]

This is a interesting piece. Certainly grabs ones attention. I rather enjoyed it. And I'd rather stay on the side lines on the f*****g and fucken debate.