If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

 

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

 

You think I'm digging my grave,

but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

 

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down

and let me breathe.

 

Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days.

 

This is it.
You've got nothing left to lose.

 

S**t.

 

If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.

Author's Note

Thank you all so much for your wonderful feedback. :)

Reviews

[Shannon]

I may come off as slightly sadistic in saying this, but i absolutely ADORE this piece. The force of each line, the power behind it is never rackingly beautiful, and the jarring flow just makes it all the more mind boggling.

What i find very interesting is the vulgarity. The piece is formed around it almost, but does not concentrate on it. Almost like each word spits its own little insult in competition with the actual curses lol.

Kudos to you my friend for this stunning piece!

[KL]

Note to self: don't mess with the author. I can feel the heat off my computer screen. Dayum.

[poetic soul]

wish i could tell you, how much i loved this one...
its super awesome...very much like what i write most often...
loved these lines the best, apart from the title, it was a KILLER:

You think I'm digging my grave,
but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

gr8 job!!!

[.]

"S**t.
If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.'
~Awesome-great poem!!!

:)

[SarahCortland]

wow definitely different i believe this could potentially become a song great writing skills freaky lol but none the less great!

[serpent]

lol... wicked kool piece! hatered written at its delightful best!
one of the finest piece of " spit it on the face" writes that I have ever read...

[AreWeBothCrazy]

Haha, bringing out the evil side :) really enjoyed this one and the irony and karma feeling behind it. well done

[trainwreck]

This is so vicious. I love it. OF course, we all know I'm TOTI.
(Twisted on the inside).
Anyway, as far as the poetry aspect, the highlights helped a lot. I enjoyed reading it again. =)

[Legion]

LOL! Love that title. Caught me and reeled me in. This is such a "in your face" piece full of attitude that you just got to love it. Kudos.

[Lilly]

Great title. Love the emotion in this - each line has an angry bite to it...

Nice work