If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

 

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

 

You think I'm digging my grave,

but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

 

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down

and let me breathe.

 

Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days.

 

This is it.
You've got nothing left to lose.

 

S**t.

 

If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.

Author's Note

Thank you all so much for your wonderful feedback. :)

Reviews

[Shannon]

I may come off as slightly sadistic in saying this, but i absolutely ADORE this piece. The force of each line, the power behind it is never rackingly beautiful, and the jarring flow just makes it all the more mind boggling.

What i find very interesting is the vulgarity. The piece is formed around it almost, but does not concentrate on it. Almost like each word spits its own little insult in competition with the actual curses lol.

Kudos to you my friend for this stunning piece!

[Iota]

well i hope he wasn't your only hope, eek!

This was actually creepy because some people actually experience this type of love. I think your poem is outstanding, nicely done.

[Desert Dreamer]

I like your poem, very strongly written...on the other hand, I was in a situation like this with someone and had no idea of his plans for me, so glad I got away from that relationship...so I got emotionally tied up in your poem and now my heart is pounding.

[Coyote Poetry]

The anger was strong. I like the hard words and pissed off feeling you have create in your words. A outstanding poem. A great ending to the poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Tate Morgan]

I liked it what a rampant disgust for such is love

This is a great poem
Funny and edgy, good job
=D

[zombiikillah666]

i like this.
&& i relate xD
great write.

[Stuff]

This was an amazing piece of work. I adore it. I like how you made the pieces that are okay without the bold, but the devilish/satanish ones in bold. I think that's just wonderful.

[Rebekah Joy]

this is amazing
beautiful
and horrible
the perfect mix

[Tony Russo]

I really like this part of the poem, because I feel read this as you taking a step back and recalling what triggered the actions/feelings from the rest of the poems:

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down
and let me breathe.

There can always be so many interpretations, but I read this as a defensive reaction...as if to say "I allowed you entrance past my hardened core and gave you access to the a vulnerable center, and you reacted by smothering me and trying to take it as yours.... (and the rest of the poem reads) I don't need your insecurities - so now feel my wrath...

Let me know if I am way off or not. As always, I respect the "I can take care of myself, if you hurt me, I'll cut off my own nose despite my face to return the favor" attitude

[TadKent]

I LOVE your poetry, because it's always edgy, it's always got a bite. I'm not a crazy drinker, but it reminds of when you drink something hard or good, and it's nice, but it hurts when it goes down. Weird analogy, I know, but all I can come up with right now. = p