If I'm your only hope.... you're f*****g screwed

You love me for the way I break your heart,
I rearrange it like its fucked up art.

 

I smile when you're hurt,
that's the only happiness your worth.

 

You think I'm digging my grave,

but darling Im digging yours.
Maybe when your dead I'll love you more.

 

You held my breath for me,
I'm ripping my heart off my sleeve.
Back the hell down

and let me breathe.

 

Covered in dirt,
blood dripping from your face,
oh honey your so beautiful these days.

 

This is it.
You've got nothing left to lose.

 

S**t.

 

If I'm your only hope,
your f*****g screwed.

Author's Note

Thank you all so much for your wonderful feedback. :)

Reviews

[Shannon]

I may come off as slightly sadistic in saying this, but i absolutely ADORE this piece. The force of each line, the power behind it is never rackingly beautiful, and the jarring flow just makes it all the more mind boggling.

What i find very interesting is the vulgarity. The piece is formed around it almost, but does not concentrate on it. Almost like each word spits its own little insult in competition with the actual curses lol.

Kudos to you my friend for this stunning piece!

[Solitary Dreamer]

I really like this peice! It reminds me of some guy I know @.@

[Orlando Murcia]

Raw and beautifully funny...

keep writing


Orlando M

[lovebug]

Oh my god, I love this piece. The fact that someone loves you so much but you hate them so much is just TWISTED, like I even don't know why this makes me smile but I think I just read your poem 3 or more times,

[...]

Gorgeous piece. I love the oxymorons; death threats and pet names.

[Joiedevivre]

subversive and wonderful!

[J.M]

Haha - this is genius - one of those poems that just really make you smile. I especially loved the ending and
'You think I'm digging my grave,
but darling Im digging yours.' - Inspired writing, truly fantastic.

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Oh, Jesus Mary and Joseph, I think this poem (or should I say a rather great song?) and I just became star-crossed lovers! Hehe XD I believe the word 'epic' was first thought of to be used to describe works of art like this. Well done, this is a great write :)

[Ashley June Canfield]

I really love this poem, it's amazing.

[Art Sun]

sounds of a turmoil in operation...

nice work on this ...

[Moflo]

Hah I like the way you ended it. If I may also point out, the profanity gives this work a nice edge and I think it came out really well. Nice work.