Wonder Why We Call You W***e

Cry all you please you f*****g tease
Get on your knees and use your mouth
Taste what hate's about

 

Please do
Bend over b***h

 

Open your mouth
And use those lips
For something other than
Talking s**t

 

Skank this ain't heart break yet

 

Your fucked up from the head down
Your next scream won't be a love sound

 

You'll see through gouged out eyes
I'll laugh as your soul cries

 

You pray he doesn't fall in love with me

I never wanted him

So b***h, please

 

Just bend over
That's all you can do

 

The only time your pretty
Is when you're broken in two.

 

You picked the wrong time to drop your heart
B***h this pain is just the start

 

Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about

 

You wonder why they call you w***e
But we all know
It's cause your nothing more
Than the f**k buddy next door

Reviews

[Devons]

This has a perversely titillating effect, though the imagining may be somewhat brutal and bitter. The sexual connotations combined with the depiction of violent revenge and taunting a victim at mercy make the poem into a double-edged sword in a sense. In fact, the way the scene is played out is rather like 'paying back in kind'... "JUST BEND OVER
That's all you CAN do"
...Puts the 'victim' in the assumed sexual position of the w***e. Divine retribution is what comes to mind, and through this the meat of the words and message is set alight. The fierceness of the language is alive with feeling, and conveys a sense of power and humour that echoes through the first-person perspective of the writing; and the characters involved in this nasty little scene are easy to imagine as a result.
"Let your tits hang out
Cause THATS what love's about"
The above lines are stand-out; pithy, bitchy, harsh, and funny. They typify the entertaining and involving nature of this work. The last verse is a forceful and satisfying conclusion which reflects the whole feeling of the poem. The words, like the actions, are like a summary execution. A character assassination. I think we all know people like this, and indeed many may well have been in or imagined being in a situation like this, it is universal. Really enjoyable.

[The Waterlily Pad]

This is so brutal and yet I find it funny in both ways: the humor you used and the ironic tone of it all. Your claiming she's bitching and yet, I haven't heard her yet but I can hear you ranting on about her! That is my harsh view although, for your daring poem and creativity, you have a extremely high mark that your poem seems to be the most memorable poem... I can tell you THAT. :)

[razormuse]

Well...I guess that is why we write, to get things off our chest. My writing can be violent too..but it doesn't necessarily mean its directed at anyone particular. Heavy thoughts for sure. I wonder if you would have the balls to actually say that to a woman or if that is the reason your thoughts are here. It didn't move me as a different kind of writing would,but I respect your right to express your self. I don't like judging or critiquing for obvious reason..but good job on getting it out!

[Marie Anzalone]

An interesting look into a brutal, uncompromising, and judgmental mindset I hope to one day be able to bury all memories of ever having been party to. You capture what happens when two half grown children starving for attention and love collide.

[Dakota]

This one I'm just not quite sure about. It took me in so many different directions. Are we hearing the words of a jilted lover? An abuser? But the dark confusion added to the effect, I think.

[VelvetRosetta]

OMGoodness...tainted in its own way, I actually find this to be well done, interesting piece you have here...

[snapjack]

Hey! I think you know my ex-friend! I feel the same way. Very nice emotion in this.

[Legion]

Sometimes that is all that someone knows how to give. Such shallowness on their behalf. I like this. Brutally honest and good description of someone like this. Well done.

[StacyPerry]

Jaded and I enjoyed it.....hummm.......wonder who created your inspiration to this one....

[Rain Kissed Secret]

I found myself smirking a lot at this. It's an interesting little tid bit of writing. ^-^ keep it up

[Blue]

Damn you sure you don't want to label this "Mature" so the young viewers won't read this? It's pretty intense. But I liked it a lot and it's very harsh, though that's what made it so intense and great. Bravo