Spiked

Spiked

A Story by Mayank
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Random 4 A.M thoughts.

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The plate on the table look exquisite, it contained nothing more than cherries, chocolate sauce with a brownie. There was something very intriguing about the dessert, in the end it is the food that you are going to consume, then why it is decorated so brilliantly that you don’t feel like eating whatever is on your plate? Anant thought while sipping an expensive coffee. He didn’t know from where this coca beans are coming from or what is so exceptional about the coffee which his lips has just tried out. Of course, it has sent some chills down in his mind and slowed down his nerves. Just the way caffeine should work.


Anant didn’t think a great deal about the dessert after that, after all he has spent 150 dollars on it. He plucked up a  wooden fork, struck a bit of brownie along with a cherry and dipped in a deep brown sauce. He bought fork close to his lips, and bit the delicate piece of brownie. It tasted much better than a way it was presented.  The chocolate melted in his mouth, he could feel the warmth right down his throat; followed by the sweet taste of cherry. In some way, the melodious music and the brownie synched in his mind.


Anant didn’t like the chair, it was perhaps one the most uncomfortable chair in the world. He was afraid of losing balance and falling right on his head. Imagine, chocolate sauce dripping from the middle aged man’s mouth while he lay unconscious. He laughed at his own thoughts. He finished his dessert and lit his cigar. The people around, stared at him curiously. Anant asked, ‘What, am I not allowed to smoke?’


They all nodded. He lit cigar and let out the puff, the smoke looked yellowish in the air due to the bonfire burning few feet away from him. He felt dizzy for a while and saw these people who are very, very poor and their eyes shine with the hunger;  while they serve best to the rest of the world. From diamond to the cocoa. Everything that the world is mad about, everything we know and we do not recognize. He wiped sweat formed on his forehead; and said, Hey! I am not coming back.


Anant saw all of them have come very near to him. A lot of dark bodies that appeared like a black hole to him now; surrounding him and making it hard for him to remember clearly, he stubbed his cigar and tried to talk but the words didn’t come to him. They all died now on his parched tongue. The gobble of sweat formed on his head, but he could still hear the music coming from the speakers; where were these speakers? Yes, he picked the song, it is from the album Aqualung by Jethro Tull. In confusion, he didn't understand where this music is coming from… his head grew heavy and in the next moment he passed out.


When Anant woke up; he saw the crisp light in his room. He watched the ants approaching his plate of brownie, smeared with the chocolate sauce. He walked towards the bathroom, taking every step carefully, his head light as feathers. He closed the door behind him and heard the clack sound  as the door locked.


When he sat for a dump, the gobble of sweat started forming on his forehead again. He lifted his gaze; and saw black bodies dangling towards him.


The flock of pigeons sitting on the window lid flew after hearing the frightening  scream. 

© 2016 Mayank


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The ending was unexpected and it was an interesting piece to read and I loved and enjoyed reading this please keep writing more


Posted 7 Years Ago


While there is an underlying meaning in the story, there were many instances wherein you could have phrased or worded better. Also, the collocation "a gobble of sweat" made no sense.

The opening paragraph, though it had a point, was struggling to find a niche.

But a fair piece overall, I must say.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is very vivid and detailed!!!! I did not see the ending coming.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow! Is this going to be a book? This is amazing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mayank

8 Years Ago

Thank you! But, I hope one day I can compile most of my stories and there is a publisher out there t.. read more
Jennifer

8 Years Ago

You should try to see if self-e.libraryjournal.com is available in your area.
That's really nice...Nicely penned..very vivid,simple and clear..keep up the good work..

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mayank

8 Years Ago

Thank you ;)
Visual depiction is outstanding in your story which melds reality with subconscious.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mayank

8 Years Ago

Thank you, friend.
This is an amazing story. Reading your stuff after a long time 'cause I was away and I thoroughly enjoyed it. It's got so much mystery, drama, mental tension and an aura of fear all weaved into it. For some reason this story reminded me of the movie Blood Diamond. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mayank

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Inaya. I was away for a while as well... long story, and snippets of autobiograph.. read more
This really intrigued me...such tension and visuals...the mind being what it is went into overdrive imagining this scenario...the details were superb...easy to place the self there and yet feel a distance that has slight terror woven within...the black bodies linger in my mind...has a good impact and well told Mayank...blessings...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mayank

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the encouraging review, Poppy.
I got more absorbed in the details while the whole thing was very enigmatic, which I like very much!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mayank

8 Years Ago

Well, one thing common in my writing is the detailing. I am happy that you were absorbed in them. Th.. read more
Random thoughts often work out better than the thoughtful ones...
It's really worth reading..
To be frank, i read it twice to understand perfectly...
I like writings, twisted and experimented..
after a long time, got to read your work, go ahead!
well done,
Anindita..

Posted 8 Years Ago


Mayank

8 Years Ago

Thank you, dear. Glad you liked it.
Anindita Janhabee

8 Years Ago

I really did..

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