Lethal Dosage

just playing with the alphabets

Lost within

Somber rage,

Day  bloomed and died.

Reviews

[Ruth]

I like the rise and fall here, the ebb and flow...somber...bloomed....then rage and died...interesting mixture of emotion to highlight the wave of feeling xo

[Mayank]

hahaha! thanks also take a notice of first alphabets in each lines.

[Ruth]

Yes, gathered the LSD :)

[Harlotte Crow]

Short, but speaks volumes. When I place myself within those words I can feel something along the lines of being stuck in a rut, a dangerous rut that could lead to mental insanity.
You move through life, almost mechanically. You want to break away but you can't. You become frustrated and upset but what can you do? And then, in almost the blink of an eye, the day is over only to start that seemingly damning process over.
Very well penned, especially as an acrostic. Extra creativity there.

[Mayank]

thank you so much for this review!

[Jennifer]

I feel the same way each day when I wake to go to work. Try to start of energized, even though I'm saddened by my current life, and come home after a long day of being yelled at on the phone.

[Mayank]

yes, sometimes, the day killed the rockstar...

[Sophy Freebirds]

City..... city .... city!! i have been recently in war with myself to go out there. Reading this i see the city roar to life then see how it crushes down the people out there.. Sensing underlying meaning down in the words.. Nice!

~Sophy

[Mayank]

Oh you took complete different meaning of this poem. Glad you did that.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Metaphysic!! Remember...??

[Azure]

wow very short but filled with so much power

[Stonz P.]

Hehehe... Sounds like a trip in the city ;)
I can imagine the realisation behind this..
Good work.
I have written a poem, unable to find its ending since October, which has a similar technique in it... I'll inbox you that segment....

[Mayank]

Thanks. It was very much expected that you will know the feel of each word behind this.

[Afraa]

This would have to be the most simple poem I have come across on this website. Although it is simple, it has BIG meaning. Well done, Mayank.

[Mayank]

Thank you so much! I am glad you liked it.

[Frieda P]

Quite the trip you've taken us on Mayank! :)

[Mayank]

Hhahaa... thanks! I am glad to see you back here.

[Frieda P]

You thought I missed that eh? ;) Thanks, happy to read you again!

[Mayank]

I knew some writers will get the catch!

[Frieda P]

'Lethal' gave you away...

[Alicia Wilson]

This is beautiful. Short, but makes the reader think. Nice work!

[Mayank]

I just want reader to think dwell on 3 alphabets. That was the only reason I wrote that.

[Vanesa Markovic]

That's the way it goes.
Very nice work!
-VM

[Mayank]

It does, addictions make you like that.