Shredding Skin

The lonely tongue hissed

It was another ugly day,

He sat shredding skin.

Reviews

[Vani Devraj]

So from your poems I understood, that you normally write micro poetry. That's good! :)
This one is well written.. Simple but effective :) best part is anyone can interpret it in their own way :)

[Mayank]

Thank you! I just write whatever I can... when I can convey message in a few lines why should I unnecessarily write those big words and full of verses!

[katja]

i'm obsessed with micro poetry & your use of brevity is amazing! it's truly a gift to say so much in so few words & it appears you've mastered a skill i could only hope to aspire to.
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thank you for sharing your pen
~yekaterina

[Mayank]

thank you so much for the kind words M, I am glad you liked it.

[Nila M.]

It also seems that everyone who reads this will find something unique to themselves. I appreciate that also.

[Mayank]

Thank you Nila for the review, glad that you liked it :)

[Nila M.]

I really appreciate the ability to condense a lot of thought into something so direct. This actually brings a lot of thoughts about many things to my mind. That's what I love in writing.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Short, but to the point. Had a great flow. I enjoyed the poem. Thank you for sharing. :)

[Mayank]

My pleasure, thank you for the review

[Angie Diane♥♥]

You are welcome.

[Patricia]

Your word use is so fascinating! I love that you use very little but so meaningful words. Very interesting thanks!

[Mayank]

thank you again so much for considering my efforts and finding meaning in my those little verses.

[Gee]

Reminds me of the strange critter that follows/leads Frodo in the Hobbit.Good job

[Mayank]

Thanks Gee, Unfortunately I have not seen Hobbit yet.

[Stonz P.]

Hey man, long time...

I like the Heroin Haiku touch in this... and that is nice... for me if not for others...
The use of 'shredding' instead of 'shedding' can be debated on as it can mean the simple act of taking off of skin made heinous by use of "ugly" measures.... Something that puts me to think.. Good work.. certainly an improvement from previous work.

[Mayank]

Hey Bro, where have you been?
I was just listening to a shredding skin by Pantera and I had this song rewinding in my head and it was really not a good day for me. Hence, the poem came up.

[Stonz P.]

Taking my usual time off the site. I have been shaping my prose up and so have no need to be on the site for the time being. Whenever poetry will come to me, I will be active here again.

[uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns]

It's amazing how you say so little yet so much in just a few lines. You leave a bunch of room for the readers imagination and it's cool that this could be seen in different ways. Good one

[Mayank]

thanks again!

[Vanesa Markovic]

I love that you used a snake as the decoy to a much deeper message.
Well, either you did do that, or I'm reading far too much into this, haha.
Very well done.
-VM

[Mayank]

I made use of snake, because I want readers spend more time reading this....