Shredding Skin

The lonely tongue hissed

It was another ugly day,

He sat shredding skin.

Reviews

[Paavana Varma]

So much said in three short lines! You've got some real talent! Thanks for sharing

[Mayank]

Thank you for reading!

[Haden]

Lately I've been looking for songs that I can relate to, but none of them do it as well as this. Great write. Thanks for sharing.

[Mayank]

Thank you! Glad you liked it.

[Ohhhwillow]

I have fallen in love with this! May you describe the muse further to me? The delicacy with which you present such dark imagery is delightful. Thanks!

[Mayank]

Thank you Willow, there are many things that you need to get rid off. However, they are not things like cloths, accessories etc. They are related to the mind, when you are lonely and days are not so good, you can shred those things and feel little light. Like the snake, shredding his old skin.

[Ohhhwillow]

And it sings now clearer to me than ever. I love I think!!

[Debra White]

Hi Mayank :)
There is some really vivid imagery in this short poem - leaves a strange image in my mind that I don't think is going anywhere soon... Food for thought.
Kindest regards, Debra

[Mayank]

Thank you Debra, be aware of pythons.

[Debra White]

You're welcome - thank you for the great advice!

[nazia]

Impressive. What a long lasting image you create out of such few words.

[Created Unfinished]

I'd like to see a longer version of this. You've gotten my attention.

[Mayank]

I really wish I had. Thank you for reading and reviewing!!

[Elisa]

Woah. This poem is so powerful, and for the first time, I have no idea how you did it. This poem was so good, I'm at a loss for words. Great job, I loved it!
-Elisa

[Mayank]

Thank you Elisa. After reading this, I can say my job is done :)

[Roshan Nair]

I need to pick up on micro poetry man. My verbose and neurotic brain cant seem to squeeze in so much into so little :/
Great work, really impressive it seems to me!

[Mayank]

you can try, it just that you have to be very specific what you want to convey!

[Roshan Nair]

Ah specificity ..my old enemy :P

[Mayank]

but the best part is you can leave that ambiguous... let the reader interpret that.

[Ishita Dixit]

This so was splendid!
Lol.
I can never be great with micro poetry.
You were amazing though!

[Mayank]

Thank you! well, you can try sometime... it's fun, basically it's all because of the twitter :/

[Tooba Binte Abdul Rashe..]

Micro poetry is not that easy to write..
You have done a great job here. Bravo!

[Mayank]

thanks for the review :)