Random Thoughts

Just thought to post my random thought...

That thought which slipped from my head, Spilled on the floor, lay wasted... I picked up another card, I hope its ace of spade. I see the world dull and hazy, I wipe my spectacles. Not sure of what I am doing, I am lost in my own verses.

Reviews

[Jamsheed Shafi]

so it seems i am not the only one who is lost.
there are other people also in the fray.
great write.

[Mayank]

Thanks Jamsheed Bhai...

[Luna Zerimar]

You got a thing going here.

Don't stop writing. K? K.

[Mayank]

sure! thanks for the read.

[hardeep sabharwal]

I can feel these words, as I can connect myself with these, I enjoyed this piece, thankyou for sharing :)

[Mayank]

Thanks Hardeep!

[Akshata.Nooli]

good one ...
this every one experiences in a real sense !!!
thoughts just dont hav any control ... they just keep flowing ...

[Mayank]

Thanks Akshata for the read....

[Awfulhabits]

question .. Does 'That thought which slipped from my head,
Spilled on the floor, lay wasted...
I picked up another card, I hope its ace of spades'

mean that you decided to go for another idea and you hope its a good one ? I loved the poem, that is what I made of it. I can see the depth behind this poem, I also write like that sometimes. excellent job sir!!

[Mayank]

Yeah, something like that... I wanted to pick another thought, however Ace of Spades has different value and highest playing card in deck, it's also known as "death card"

[Awfulhabits]

I did not know that thank you for sharing that information

[GreenEyes]

Nice. I like it. Very interesting poem.

[Mayank]

Thanks for the read Green

[Rene Salinas]

I like this Mayank I have forever ignored the world of technicalities in writing, lately I have seen so many comments becoming more and more intellectual forever reciting the rules of do's or don'ts the funny thing is if you do that you seem to miss the most refreshing side of the writing which is to allude to the volatily of thought. Thought here meant generically so it can be one or many and even the attempt to clear you gaze still leaves you immersed in the randomness that we indeed are.

Clever and aware.

Thankyou

[Mayank]

Thanks Rene for such an awesome review!

[Stonz P.]

Well, there is an error:

"I picked up another card, I hope it's the ace of spades"

It needs to be longer because you write "thoughts" in the title and there is only one significant thought which is random indeed. Or else make the title singular; much more simpler that way.

I hope you write some more to add to this.

[Mayank]

It was more like Stream of Consciousness and I couldn't think anything more, maybe someday I will think on this and try rewriting... where did you disappear?

[Stonz P.]

You can work on the arrangement and formatting after writing in the thought process.
I myself practice it. Writing a first draft is essential to be written automatically. Revisions are allowed.

I am avoiding the site. Takes up time.

[Mayank]

Yeah, that's true. I will try to work on it...

[ayesha gupta]

it happens with me after waking..thousands of though..of dreams, work etc.
i liked reading it.

[Mayank]

thanks Ayesha!

[Matching Socks]

Life is truly very random.
We can try to plot our course as best we can but certain life events are beyond our control.

[Mayank]

Thanks Ana, for the read... :)