Unintended Illustration

Never ignore poverty, there are children who are content outlining their desires with water...

I saw her sitting under staircase at railway platform

She was a poor homeless kid, dressed in a shabby red frock.

It was drizzling that evening and commuters kept rushing

And there she sat smiling and playing with her two little brothers.

Then the water started dripping from the roof

She doused her fingers in it and sat on the ground.

She started sketching there with her soaked fingers

I stood there, amused and stunned.

Few minutes later, her sketch was over

Albeit it had started fading but I could see what it was.

It was a smiling doll, dancing and fooling around

She felt embarrass, when she knew I was observing her.

I didn’t bother her neither did she cared

Her face glowed next second, pleased with her own illustration.

She’s didn’t know remedy to keep her art intact

Either rain will wash away or water will be vaporized.

That was her reflection, painted so neatly on ground

An unintended diagram of her life,

Either rains will wash her away or the day

When she would be vaporize.

Reviews

[Anuja Pawar]

beutiful and deep..nce...

[Mayank]

thanks Anuja!!!

[Ishita Dixit]

Either rains will wash her
away or the day
When she would be vaporize.

Amazing lines!
I loved it Mayank.
Nicely done.

[Mayank]

Thank you so much Ishita, glad that you like it.

[Ishita Dixit]

You're welcome! :)

[Roshan Nair]

Great story, simplistic enough to picture, the emotions of contentment in however existence is and how it impermanent it is comes through beautifully.
Good work!

[Mayank]

Thank you Roshan! I have feeling that I have seen you somewhere, at some gig.

[Roshan Nair]

My pleasure Mayank! its possible, ive been college bound in pune for 2 years now, I play around with the college band mostly on the bass guitar.

[Mayank]

Haha! that I made out... I have attended many gigs, it's just last year because of some issues I am not getting chance to attend. Still regret that I missed Big69.

[Roshan Nair]

Lol yeah man... I heard about big69 way later. I'm still new to the Indian metal scene. What kinda music you into?

[Mayank]

I am into everything from, jazz, blues to classic rock and metal, sometimes I listen to rap and very very few trance artist. I listen to any good music except pop and typical hiphop/trance s**t.

[Roshan Nair]

Your preferences in genres are almost identical to mine. I listen to everything from jazz,blues,metal, hard alt classic rock, reggae, soul etc.. rap a bit. With pop its just the classics, trance sometimes when the settings right maybe. didnt think id find someone with similar musical tastes here

[Mayank]

Hahaha! no worries. There are few more on this site.

[ayesha gupta]

they say true that a poet's eye capture things beyond the imagination of common people. simple language. i liked it.

[Mayank]

thank you ayesha

[hardeep sabharwal]

such a great message in a beautifully written poem, great job dear friend

[Pryde Foltz]

An unintended diagram of her life,
Either rains will wash her away or the day
When she would be vaporize.

A spellbinding tale.

[Jennie Baron]

My impression is the same as April's; the concept is beautiful and touching. As she said, the grammar could use some work. I would actually consider it a story rather than a poem. I like it very much overall.

[Mayank]

Thanks Jennie for a feedback, going through a damn writer's block and I am working hard on grammatical skills.

[Jennie Baron]

Ah yes, writer's block. I'm going through it myself and haven't composed any new poems recently. I'm working on refining my book in the meantime.

[Mayank]

That would be good. Certainly, we can read lot other stuff in a meanwhile.

[AprilRN1210]

pretty powerful message that speak to the heart of the reader... there are a few grammar issues, but overall pretty nice write that tugs on the heartstrings..

[Mayank]

thanks April.

[Enigmatic Amor]

An unintended illustration and an intended observation. This is a touching snapshot of a life and of a moment. Nicely done.

[Mayank]

thank you so much :)

[Frieda P]

A heart tugging read, and a great title, you've painted this picture so vividly, a few edits are in need but didn't take away from the sentiment of your story. Well done Mayank.

[Mayank]

thank you Frieda for stopping by.