Old Man and his Thoughts

The second hand of clock is broken;
Mist settled on my window, my legs are frozen.
The man on radio keeps on blabbering,
I'm half deaf, and I have lost my will of understanding.
I knocked down my spectacles accidentally;
I don’t recognize you, I struggle with my own identity!
I seek refuge from the odor of medicines;
my bottom itches, I apologies for my etiquette.
My neighbor’s daughter feed me bread,

My son never returned from battle
where’s my old woman?  She’s dead.

My insanity ripples me, my silver hair beacons me.

Forgive me for my handwriting

My hands tremble, and I can’t see.

 

Reviews

[dan]

Mayank, I saw the title to the poem and thought, "Oh, good; Mayank has written a poem about me!" Kidding aside, though, this write contained a lot of truisms about the nagging aging process. They say that you're only as old as you feel, but I'm 58 and feel every second of 58. This was a very nicely written piece. Well done! take care...dan

[Mayank]

Thank you Dan! I am 26, I don't what else to say... maybe, you can read my another poem It's My Coffin. Don't worry it's not emo stuff.

[Mamta Vashisht]

Awesome poem dude! Could image clearly the scene of a lonely, ill man in his old age.

[Mayank]

Yes, that's what I wanted to convey...

[Mamta Vashisht]

And you did it well!

[Prashant Pandey]

what a write bro. superb thought process. very touchy.

[Mayank]

thank you!!!!

[Shubham Joshi]

This poem I really felt like something inside me on reading it.
It is a great poem

[Mayank]

thank you for the review

[Deepika]

Wonderful write! Though the imagination of myself over 60 years scares me, I enjoyed this piece of writing! It's got overt humor with acute feelings..(y)

[Mayank]

True! It scare when we think of growing old. This was the reason I wrote few poems which are related to old age. Thank you for reviewing!

[Roshan Nair]

Great touching write man, I think there's great sense of reality involved here,old age is a state where we are all defenseless to the world and its works, you've put em across very nicely. cheers

[Mayank]

Thank man! glad you liked it.

[Ana B.]

Raw and passionate. Fabulous poem.....it struck a chord.....amazing work!

[Mayank]

Thank you so much for reviewing!

[Awfulhabits]

oh man once again !! My eyes teared a little bit. 'my son never returned from battle' AMAZING!

[Mayank]

thanks for the review!

[Metal Orchid]

Very powerful imagination man, keep up the good work

[Mayank]

Thank you so much!

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful description create bad places and visions. I could feel the struggle and the need to know how the person got to this point. A strong ending to the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mayank]

Thanks Coyote, I would request you to read It's My Coffin you will get the idea about my series. Secondly, imagination can take you anywhere. Imagination transformed 25 year old guy to an old man.