Mortician's rendition

dying with eyes open

is having a funeral

with your coffin so;

I only want God

reading the secrets

on the back of my

retina, and my retinue

in its chairs, seated,

not standing in line

to read the mortician's

tabloid rendition.

Reviews

[angel]

I have to say, I don't understand the message of this piece at all.
My uncle had a friend who was a mortician, and as a child I was curious about exactly what he did.
His kids were quite generous with their ghoulish dead people stories, and apparently lots of folks die with an unpleasant facial expression.
The mortician's kids said, (and I have since found out they were telling the truth) that their dad glued people's eyelids shut, so that they would not roll up and expose the eyeballs of the dead. Likewise, the mouth, to keep it from dropping open.
Therefore, you'd better not die, man. If you do, you just may be f***ed as far as information about your death rictus is concerned.
Just saying.

[Maxwell Ryder]

I don’t want an open coffin, and people making guesses about how I died, and guessing badly based on the ability to make me look clownish in death.

[angel]

I'm donating my old, unlovely body to the body farm in Tennessee. No funeral.

[Maxwell Ryder]

I may have to get in on the act one day myself. Thanks for visiting. Come again any time.

[Coyote Poetry]

This is poetry Maxwell.
" only want God
reading the secrets
on the back of my
retina,"
The above lines. I did like. I could write a epic poem from. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Onlyme]

Wow, this is deep, dark and hauntingly good. Creepy even. As no one, when they die. Just wants some strange person reading something about them or mixing them up. The way they perceived you where when you where alive. When only God or someone really close to you understands what makes you tick and who you are. And what you liked and hated.

[Maxwell Ryder]

Dawn, absolutely - thanks for understanding what I was after. I will keep my death to myself.