Her Poem

time and circumstance

forces holding us at bay

notions of our union resting

harmony turns dissonant

when i listen to the tones

the shrill cries of passing stars

i try in vain to leap aboard

scarred from having so misjudged

the heights that i am not allowed

in spite of my heart’s bursting

but i have felt the shards of piercing

work their way into my song

words imbued that shape the softened

strings that set this soul to brood

in the offset glow of winter

swept away by undertow

one day we will walk while tethered

in the hour of silent prose

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Gentle, honest and kind flow of emotions.
"in the offset glow of winter
swept away by undertow
one day we will walk while tethered
in the hour of silent prose"
The above closing lines. A feel of a Leonard Cohen song. Thank you Max for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Max Meunier]

thank you so much for your generously kind review. your words made me feel like you understood the emotion of what i was feeling at that time. and your last comment was about the best thing i could ever have heard though you give me far more credit than i deserve. your kindness has lifted me up and has made this day for me. i thank you and have much appreciation for your time and consideration.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Writeforlovely]

I really enjoyed this. It's so dark and magical. Great job!! I love the lines, "i try in vain to leap aboard
scarred from having so misjudged
the heights that i am not allowed
in spite of my heart’s bursting"

[Max Meunier]

thank you so much for being kind enough to both read and review my poem. i genuinely appreciate this.