Pleasantly Breaking Down

Fall in fall out
Give in give out
Unearthing gust
Stumble and mumble
Silently subtle
Crumble into dust
When it is exposed
It makes way for a rose
That blooms then fades away

You know you know
You know you know
It’s all just relative
So pressurize
Pressurize those lies
Breakdown to the core
You know everything
But everything means nothing
When we pleasantly fall apart

Tear it all away
For a new foundation today
Leave it unadorned
Soon it will be torn
But torn is not enough
Until we all just fall apart 

Eat away eat away
Eat away eat away
Self-indulging rust
Chew it in eat it out
Suck it in spit it out
And leave the rest for us
If decay seems slow
Then bury it with lye
So no obstacle could resist or even try

Parallel parallel
Parallel parallel
These words return you
A sump pump slender
Vacuum splendor
Loveless die-cast gloom
There’s nothing left of me
But still you tear me down
And when I return I bleed into the ground

Slowly breaking down
Starting with my crown
Isn’t that enough
Now my body’s torn
But torn is not enough
Until you just tear me all apart

Reviews

[Maria]

That was very awsome

[PhantomDancer]

That's surprisingly effective, the way you have used short lines to great effect. For some reason, I really like the line "Vacuum splendor"!!!

[J.R Schlievert]

lol reminds me of a song! 2 reasons

1) it has a very nice rhythm to it :) I can actually hear a beat as I'm reading

2) you have a way with words that a song writer would.

[Jason Henry]

i love the rhyming scheme...its different. lyrics with substance always make a hell of a song...great job

[Bri]

wow, this was a very nice poem. the abrupt endings of the lines and careful repetition of words made the poem have a need to be read, fast, loud, and ferociously almost. really powerful.