A TRIBUTE TO HER...

for all those who still dont know what a woman is...

Some call her an elegant Gladula

Others call her a Daisy

Yet some say she's a sweet kitten

Her looks drive me crazy!!!

She's meek and frivolous

Far from being pragmatic

A dependent heart and mind

Has no reason and tactic!!!

You don't need her suggestions

It might lead you to disaster

Just show some love and sympathy

She'll perform her duties faster!!!

Oh Silly man!!!!

Your eyes are blindfolded

You are a rotten soul

Gates of your mind are bolted!!!

Look at her... Delve deep...

You'll find will and perseverance

Courage and Conviction

Her Selfless Love and Patience!!

She rises above all odds

Supports through thick and thin

She'll shed buckets of tears

Yet face you with a charming grin!!!

If you still don't get my words

Let her be a Mystery

Lead your life the way you want

Your foolishness is now History!!!

Because she's not a kitten

She's a valiant Lioness

Who catches the cunning prey

Doesn't mind your being the King, I guess!!!

She's a land unexplored

Her secret is clandestinely hidden

An inseparable part of this creation

She's but and only a Woman!!!  

 

Author's Note

hmm... not much to say but i might edit it later... for now you check it out and do tell me your reviews... :))) And bdw the rhyme scheme is inspired by "Tate Morgan" and the rest is all original... :P

Reviews

[The Perfectionist]

Some of your rhymes are...stretched, to say the least, but at least they actually work.

The problems I found in your earthquake poem pop up again here, and so I'll just summarize.

It feels like you are using poetry as a shield; that just because you don't need full sentences means you can throw down anything you like, whether it makes sense or not. Which is not to say that it's gibberish, but just that it's very hard to take your narrator seriously when every other stanza makes me want to slap them for talking like that.

It's also worth pointing out that there are two parts to flow; rhyme and rhythm. Your rhyme is dodgy, but at least it's there. Don't forget about rhythm. You can't just make lines however long you want; it needs to fit with the rest of the stanza it's in.

Just remember, just because it's poetry and not prose doesn't mean you can do whatever you want. If anything, poems are more restrictive.

[yashasvi]

woman power ....olwz lvd d idea ...strong women! :)
nice write!

[Dev]

Girl power !! haha :P Nice !!

[loverly9316]

i love it it reminds me of someone i know . . .

[Shreya]

love it..........its pure n nice yet dangerour........wonderful read

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

this is a beautiful write, i love the way you describe a woman:)

[Thomas Fleet]

Wow, I really liked reading this!
I myself happen to find a woman to be most fascinating.
You do a good job at description and rhyme scheme in this poem.
:)

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the way you described this woman in the poem. This piece of writing is descriptive and the flow is easy and effortless to follow.

[Constance-Outspoken]

Of course no woman would not love this poem... I'm not sure about the rhyme... some of the lines don't work together, and rhyme without perfect meter is very hard to pull off. Besides... do you really need to limit yourself with a form? Rhyming is nice, but your thoughts are the greater part of your poetry. Nice write. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is very good. Description of a woman was outstanding. Take 50 years with a woman for a man know but a bit. Woman give man purpose and reason. A amazing poem. Your description was perfect.
Coyote