This poem reads just weird. It's like it wants to have a rhythm, but you're insisting on making it not have one. I like it, but I think it would be much improved if you rewrote it either sticking to the rhythm that keeps trying to develop or just abandoning the half-completed structure altogether.
i love this it is inspiring to me to never give up and you ill have a positive outcome i like this oh yeah and good job cuz some people are lazy and like to plagerize(how ever you spell that lol)
This is so encouraging, for times will always come to knock us down... We show what's inside us by rising up every time... This is victory.. to go on. You express this so well!
that's the spirit!
that's the spirit of a true winner
this boosts up the positive attitude and the attitude of not giving up, keep on striving and never loosing hope among the reader
I love your choice of words
~Aaradhya
its hard to describe me... i m a wave- calm n pleasing, a grain- worthless yet with a beauty of its own, i m silence i m depth... i m nothing yet something... more..