FORBIDDEN

"FORBIDDEN"

In the day she breathes, 

the world around her seems real.

The ocean, she grants life 

to beings - great or small.

But at night, a profound sadness engulfs her,

for she sees the forbidden love of her life.

Her damp arms long to touch him,

but the moon is miles away!

He looks at her in awe,

the dazzling light they cast together.

But silently knows, 

that it will be long before they meet.

The ocean promises not to cry.

But when she does, her tears cloud the sky,

and cast a veil that separates her from him.

But they do know that the universe favors those who love.

So they wait, wait patiently,

for the day they will unite!

Author's Note

Hope you like it :)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Gentle and powerful journey in the poetry.
"So they wait, wait patiently,
for the day they will unite!"
I liked the above lines. Left reader with vision and hope. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Maumil Mehraj]

Many thanks for reading

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Miss Sharon]

Indeed I do like it! A delicate touch of mystical imagery to keep your reader spellbound and reading to the end. Which I did! ~Sharon

[Maumil Mehraj]

Thanks very much for reading! And I am glad you liked it ^_^

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
wonderful......beautiful......
great way to depict a love story......
absolutely loved it!!!
:)

[Maumil Mehraj]

Thanks very much... Glad you liked it :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are very welcome!!! :) :)

[Ashadan]

I could really hear the sounds inside the poem. Great job. Keeps writing =)

[Maumil Mehraj]

Many thanks for reading :)

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

I loved the poem. It is so different. A well thought out concept and the way you put it into words is admirable. I like your style of writing. The poem has great flow and imagery. The emotions are also very well expressed. Great job! :)

But at night, a profound sadness engulfs her,
for she sees the forbidden love of her life.
These lines are so beautiful and heart-touching.

Her damp arms long to touch him,
but the moon is miles away!
I liked the way you named the moon in the 4th line after talking about the love of the ocean. I was really curious to know who you were talking about and introducing him a little late was a fantastic idea as it had me totally glued to know who he was. The passion is so clear in these lines. You've written superbly! :)
He looks at her in awe,
the dazzling light they cast together.
But silently knows,
that it will be long before they meet.
Wow! They're just too cute for words! :D

The ocean promises not to cry.
But when she does, her tears cloud the sky,
and cast a veil that separates her from him.
What a brilliant idea! You're a true poet! :) I absolutely loved these lines.
But they do know that the universe favors those who love.
So they wait, wait patiently,
for the day they will unite!
Now that's true love and that is what you call a love poem. Outstanding work, Maumil! :)

[Maumil Mehraj]

You got it right, I wanted to introduce the moon a little later so to build the suspense!
Thanks very much for your appreciation ... :)

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

You're most welcome! :)

[AaronFreitas]

I really liked it... especially the last two lines. "So they wait, wait patiently,
for the day they will unite!" Good work!

[Maumil Mehraj]

Many thanks Aaron :)

[R Smith]

This reads beautifully and i see the ocean flowing and drifting to the pull of the moon that creates its tides, a love between two forces that can overcome time and find unity in the eternity of time, fantastic poem Maumil :)

[Maumil Mehraj]

I am so glad you could connect with it...Thanks for the lovely review Richard sir :)