Beginning Of Hope

This isthe story of Rain Hope Branaby....This is just the prologue so its not much but its definitly a change up from my Gaurdian Angel Project....Tell me what you think about the start

RAIN HOPE BARNABY: CHARACTER INSPIRED BY EMMA STONE

TYLER ROWE: CHARACTER INSPIRED BY SHIA LEBOUF

JASON MARSH: CHARACTER INSPIRED BY JOSH HARTNETT

JENNI HASTINGS: CHARACTER INSPIRED BY HAYDEN PENETEIRRE

KRISTINE BARNABY: CHARACTER INSPIRED BY JULIANNE MOORE

PRIME: CHARACTER INSPIRED BY LIV SCHRIEBER

TOMB: CHARACTER INSPIRED BY DENZEL WASHINGTON

My mother always called me her miracle baby...She was the one person in life I always looked up to, the one person I could always count on, my hero to be honest...That was until my 12th birthday when, during my party I might add, she picked up and left me alone with a bunch of people I hardly knew...Greatest present I ever recieved...Suffice it to say, my life was always sucky like that....My awesome mommy did leave me with one small tidbit of info as she was on the verge of totally losing her mind "One day you will realize why this is happening"...Pretty straight forward, especially for a 12 year old who had no idea of anything outside the box that was her mother....My name is Rain Hope Barnaby...Oddly enough, out of all the things I did get made fun of and tormented for while growing up, my name wasn't one of them...My mom said my father gave me the name to "carry as a great responsibility"....She said it was an honor bestowed upon me by a higher power...S**t...No wonder the old lady went psycho...Speaking of my father, he was always the biggest mystery in my life...One month after I was born and he was sure I was in good health he felt it his duty to leave...Once again more reason to be visiting mommy in the psych-ward these days...One thing she always reasurred me of was that no matter how long and dark the storm...the sun will follow...The one thing she was dead on about...It was three years after she ditched me that I met my true hero, my true love, my one and only rock in my life...It was the freshman year of my highschool nightmare, or so I thought...That is until I met Jason Marsh and it seemed as though that sun my mother was talking about had finally arrived..

Author's Note

This is story I just started on...This is the prologue so you won't really get much out of it yet but I think its looking pretty good-

Reviews

[Legacy]

Okay Matty,

I must inform you that, without reading another piece of this, I am most interested. You see, you have all of the qualities any publisher or reader is looking for to become hooked!!!

The bait is on, the line test is good, and the weight holds... my word.

You have the makings of a writer - coming from the perspective of "a writer" I would say this... on a rather less hectic day, a day I can sit back with my feet up and relax, I would choose to have this book in front of me rather than the television! (or FaceBook)

Bravo, excellent job! I will indeed delve in, when I can finally put my feet up and relax.

Thank you,

Legacy

Oh, P.S. would you do me a huge favor? I see you read a ton of writes and review the like. If you would be so kind and spread the kindness to one of my writes?

Also, we have a website:

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Please, become a member, takes a second and it is free to join and participate!

[Matty Bosox]

Well Legacy, it seems that cute little firey redhead's story is really catching alot of attention...WAY more than what I expected!!! Its funny that my project The Gaurdian Angel Project is being edited and hopefully after the artwork is done it will be in the finall stages of publishing for a graphic novel series....And the story of Rain Hope Barnaby has caught more attention on here than the GAP ever could!!! It definitly comes as a HUGE suprise to me because this jsut popped in my head and I just went with it cause I was getting bored of writing for the GAP..This was only supposed to be a break from that project and it turned into a blast!! Which now leaves me at a crossroads...Stick with Rain or the Gaurdians?!?!? LoL Now if your going to read more into this...I didn't realize that you had to put things in book form to keep the chapters together....I put them out there and classified them as stories so they are now all over the place LoL :o( Sucks when people get into it..But hopefully that won't affect you...BTW I have a ton of requests and I am taking the night off to go through them all...I love reviewing and people call me great at it LoL Probably because I know that writers want in depoth reviews because like me, it keeps them going...Its like a writers fuel....Now I can also be very blunt...If something isn't good I will say so...But I explain good or bad in depth how and why I felt the way I did...Thank you again Legac y

[Hester Vane]

Amazing prologue! I actually think you can get quite alot from this about things which may or may not happen. It captured my interest anyway! I got some of your read requests for your later additions to this story so i thought i would start at the beginning, and i will definatley be contining to read! This is my kind of story! Cant wait to read more.

[Jon Roggie]

Interesting. Like the background that you are establishing. This gives me a view on how to expand my own style. I will look at the rest of the chapters as time permits.
Even though you say it is the prologue, the beginning only gives you the hope of what may follow.

[Matty Bosox]

Thank you very much Jon....I always appreciate the reviews....This story seems to be getting the most for me...Which is a suprise because this just came out of nowhere...Where as my other project was planned out and worked on for seven years before I sent it to NY to get edited and published

[Ama May Cooper]

Brilliant beginning.
Sweet and very hooking. You instantly draw in your reader and leave them gagging for more. Wonderful

[Matty Bosox]

Its funny that you say that....I always tell people who ask me about writing and how they should start something that its all about hooking people in from the very first sentence or they just lose interest...If you start something out boring and drug out the reader just loses patience and says I'm done with this....I always start out a story with something that is going to make the reader say WHAT??? or REALLY??? or something with alot of action...Alot of people who read my stuff say thats what kept them reading was the beginning...I find if you read an amazing beginning to a story then you have the reader by the throat and can then add the boring stuff in between....Most readers will then tolerate it because they know eventually something intense is going to happen....Once again..Thank you Ama May

[Ama May Cooper]

Perfectly said! I totally agree , the beginning is one of the most important parts of a story, its the first taste .. the first bite.
In the same way if someone watches a movie.. the first scene must be interesting something has to make you keep watching asking questions.
If there is nothign to wonder about, or intreag you ... why would you want to know where it went or ended up at all.

[Gothic Girl]

great start here! i really like how you used the 1st POV and how you established the tone of the story, well at least the prologue. :) it made me want to read more. off to the next one! :)

[Matty Bosox]

Thanks Goth I really appreciate it alot...You guys know I LOVE reviewing your stuff but I also like the reviews back....Its like a writing fuel that keeps me going.....I think every writer can say the same...Without anybody to read something whats the point...I'm sure you get that...

[Gothic Girl]

you're right. it's the writer's fuel. :) i really struggled at first because i didn't know if what i'm writing is good or bad. some only leave reviews. glad to have helped! :)

[Matty Bosox]

Tha is what keeps a writer writing, its extremely rare to find a writer who just wants to write for their own enjoyment,,,,Without people reading the stuff it seems like alot of hard work for nothing.

[Coyote Song]

Enough information to keep the reader interested. In my opinion I think you did a good job in this prologue.

[Owlgirl]

Am excited for the rest!

[emilythestrange]

I think this is gona be great, and I can't wait to read more! No typos or corrections for the grammer, but watch out, I'm like a vulture for these things...

[afra]

wow awesome .....cant wait to see more

[Matty Bosox]

Thanks Afra...And let me tell ya something...Keep up the excellent writing...It seems like your writing good/bad streaks are turning into no streak at all...Keep it up kiddo!!

[afra]

thank you

[Barbara Walker]

I can certainly hear her "voice". I think it's very good! I look forward to reading more!

[Matty Bosox]

Thank you...I love using inspirations for my characters so you can get a real feel for what the characters would look and act like.