Save Me

From my personal collection

Seven days, Seven ways
Seven plays I have attended
Seven broken hearts I should have mended

Promises broken as the devil's selfish
Wiped clean yet still to revel anguish

The fragrance of vagrants slides across my lip,
and to think this whole time I've been
Shooting from the hip

Seven times I've lost my mind
Seven times I've tried to find
Evidence I've not chewed down the melon rind

Or convince me to keep it on a leash
Still to break my God given lease

Author's Note

Enjoy

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. Last line - I'd hyphenate 'god given'. Makes more sense that way and looks more attractive.
Also, the A-A-A rhyme of the fourth stanza is a little grating, maybe switch up one of those lines?
Either way, this is a good piece, and you've definitely gotten across what you wanted to. Well done.