These Girls

This a poem about my female freinds. They suffer a pain that if i had made clear this poem would be rated for Adults. I think this happens more than we relise. but what can we do except listen?

These Girls

 

These girls that surround me

Pain fills their lives

Help is what they need

Help I want to offer

Help I cannot give

 

These girls that surround me

They’ve done nothing wrong

Pain they experience

Pain is forced on them

Pain they cannot escape

 

These girls that surround me

That I cannot help

Pain they feel

Pain I want to share

Pain that I cannot possibly imagine

(possible last verse)

These Girls in my life

My friends

My family

My love 

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

Sounds almost like a cursed existence, by extension & expansion could translate into a vampiric or werewolf type of narrative depiction, or even another poem. Who knows? I am sorry for them though.

These days I tend to forget about their pain & how it ails them. When I was growing up there were like a dozen females in the house & it was part of our joined existence. Now that I live independently, I hardly ever have to be around when that happens.

Your compassion & concern rings clear & sincere throughout the poem, & you wrote it with great delicacy, without a trace of derision or mockery or scorn. Uplifting & with great respect & compassion. In fact, quite sensitive & mature approach.

Thank you for sharing.

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Red Brick Keshner]

You are most welcome, Matt. I guess your poem had its way with me, thus the lengthy response.

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

Lengthy responses are good! unless you are particularly talented with words, one or two words dont tell you much :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

The 3 verses are almost the same though stated differently. LOL
Indeed, when someone asks our help but we can do nothing to help him/her, it's so heartbreaking.

I'm a woman, and I was moved by the concept of this poem.

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

Yes the Verses are ALMOST the same but not quite. while the first line is repeated exactly every verse the second line is different and the final 3 lines refer to what the 2nd line says and while the final verse follows this same pattern it is there to really enforce what I'm saying. Its nice to get reviews on this poem from women. for some reason i think they may understand my words in this poem more than the guys... thats not really a fair thought is it...?

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Glad you have that concern for women. Those who don't value women are those who don't value their mothers and sisters, as to my opinion.

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

This Poem is more about friends. I think anyone would feel this way if their friends were hurting weather emotionally or physically. this poem is about the girls in my life simply because i felt like every female friend i had was dealing with some sort of pain at the time and only a couple of guys had troubles.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're a good friend, but would be a better one if you can do something for them. LOL

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

With these Problems i did what i could i listened but felt it was not enough

[Keith]

Very emotional write.

[koty bell]

great write:)

[Stephany Anna]

That's lovely. Very sweet.