Rules

this was a "Song" I wrote when i was younger it was late at night it seems to flow a little so im gonna call it a poem insted.

Rules

As I go through life

I look at things and say

Why can’t I do what I want?

Isn’t this a free country?

Well I know there are laws

To keep me safe at night

But right now

I wanna just do my own thing

 

I’m goin through life

Pain plague n my mind

Is it me?

Is it she?

Is it he?

Is it us?

Hush hush

Keep it quiet

Don’t you know?

There looking now

We need to know what’s wrong

We need to know before too long

 

These kids are pullin my life apart

These kids are pullin me down

Well I need to do something

But rules keep me from that

But if I can’t do anything

Nothing can be done

 

I look at that face

Sweet as the daylight

Storm clouds gather

Lightning splits the sky

The one I can talk to

I just can’t turn to face

It seems I’m alone

But I guess ill just go on

 

These kids are pullin my life apart

These kids are pullin me down

Well I need to do something

But rules keep me from that

But if I can’t do anything

Nothing can be done

 

I’m looking at my life

If nothing can be done

I’ll just do my own thing

Cos they say it’s a free country

Well I know there are rules

But I just don’t care anymore

I’m doin my own thing

 

These kids are pullin my life apart

These kids are pullin me down

Well I need to do something

But rules keep me from that

But if I can’t do anything

Nothing can be done

 

But these kids are pullin my life apart

These kids are pullin me down

Well I need to do something

But rules keep me from that

But if I can’t do anything

Nothing can be done

Reviews

[Snickers]

this sounds more of a song than a poem. I like it. Keep it up Hon.
Dream

[Poetry Girl]

wow i can really hear this as if it was a song. i dont know if it was supposed to be, but it sounds kind of like a hard core rock song mabye. or maybr a slow rock. i dont know, but its good and i liked it. it wasnt th easiest to read for me, but probably because it should be heard. i think you should keep it as a song.. or both a song and poem. either way, nice job

[Brittany W]

this poem flows together well, its sounds deep buts not too deep, just enough to say what you want, and it being know. i enjoyed reading it, good write.

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

poems dont have to Rhyme they need to flow Amy

[Amy]

ah interesting i love it of cause but interesting yeah it flows but you dod know that poems don't rely have to

[Sci-Fi]

sweet. sounds cool, i love part six, it's realy mad.
keep up the good work.