Prologue-Life tracker

A little explination.

Prologue

So what can I do today? It’s a question we all ask ourselves. Something you take for granted as a simple question that just might not turn out how you want. You don’t know exactly what’s going to happen until it happens. Well for me it’s not that simple. Imagine being able to choose what happened in your day and not a single thing could change it unless you chose to change it. Well that’s what I do. I can see 24 hours into my future because I’m a life tracker. Life trackers can choose what track in life they travel down. What road there life travels down. I see the different options I have and what will happen from that point in time and the next 24 hours for every choice In less than a second and in a full second I see were in the next 24 hours I will have a choice to make that could change the track I’m on. It has its advantages sure, but when it comes to other life trackers we are blind which is why when the government wants you dead they find you quietly with normal people like you, then send out other life trackers. Because we can’t see other trackers. At the moment... the government really wants me dead.

Reviews

[Miss Coral]

There are some grammar mistakes, and I think that this could be broken up into at least two paragraphs. Also, there's a contradiction. If life trackers can't see life trackers, then how could they find the main character? All in all, could turn out to be a very interesting story. Good luck! :)

[Ardeth Lane]

This is interesting. Very interesting. You've definatly caught my attention with it and I'm curious to know where this will go. But, I do agree with the first reviewer, two paragraphs. And the word 'there' should be their.