Legend of the golden Aurum bird

Snappy poem about a legendary Aurum bird who sang in jewels

The proud Aurum bird is not one to be caught

An ave on which legends are made and battles fought

 

With a plumage of Gold, and jewelled legs to stand upon

It’s hatched from a Faberge egg, born at the glowing dawn

 

With each high joyful note, a glistening gem appears

And when tired weaves nests of silver, cries silk for tears

 

The Aurum bird, its rich song sweeter than a siren

Roams free in history, amongst men keen to find them

 

The hand of Midas, the Aurum bird did once tease

And momentarily caught by Jason with his fleece

 

It stayed the longest of time with a kind Pizarro

Following Inca fortune trails down to El Dorado

 

But history makes the Aurum bird’s loyalty loose,

To avoid becoming mankind’s next golden goose

Author's Note

Aurum is the chemical name for gold (Au), and means "glowing dawn" in latin. This "legend" is made up, but I mention a few famous ones too. Partly a metaphor about art and media. Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Theresa]

Amazing imagery and detail. I could envision the bird while I was reading. I like how you incorporated little bits of history and legends as you created your own. I loved the lines:
"With a plumage of Gold, and jewelled legs to stand upon
It’s hatched from a Faberge egg, born at the glowing dawn"
Your description really brings the legend to life.

[SoulofManyFaces]

Not familar with this legend, but you made it so lush,
rich in color and song.

[Millionth Muse]

This is quite beautiful...and it told a story that I hadn't really heard before. I love poetry that weaves in things of historical or mythical significance. Great flow, beautiful word choice...you are one fantastic poet, my friend. :)

[Therene]

I've never been so glad to read an element in my whole life. :)) I like the chime of both Aurum and Hydragyrum in paper.

Now, to the content. You made the legend seem true to its context. Well, it somewhat is. You've painted a beautiful picture, I must say.

Technicals: Rhyme, rhythm and flow intertwined together to for a beautiful poem.

Job well done. :D

[Ian]

This a good poetry i just read. All i did was wacthing in my head the bird developing to grow. The poem gave me a feel of what the Aurum bird is, a one of a kind. Please write more poetry.

[AdvisorGirl]

It's really cool. I like it.

[JudeTrain]

This is an interesting subject to write a poem, kind of refreshing compared to others I've been reading haha. Some nice words here, a few i had to look up, mainly because I'm not too familiar with this golden bird, which i'm now keener to learn about i can say. This poem is nice and flows as well as it can, i definitely learned something new (which i appreciate), and enjoyed the bit of humor at the end. Well done 80/100