Hardly Human

I came…
So close to surrendering these memories.
You'll have to forgive me,
I’ve been running so long I tend to forget but…
I can still smell its breath.
It smelled like regrets.
It smelled like contempt.
It smelled like a stockpile of secrets kept,
and I kept them, tucked neatly underneath my pillow so that when I fell asleep at night I knew I
Was closer to the truth.
My condolences to anyone who has read them,
These messages I have taped to the back of train wrecks
So the rescue crew could read them.
As they gasp and as air breaks
It sounds like mistakes
It sounds like...
I pressed the pen to paper to let out a whisper
That sounded out the syllables of something...
I don't remember.
But I recall...
I was...
crawling
or...
walking.
Destiny had called my name to ask what I was going to do with my life and
I didn't have an answer.
Staring at my shadow I realized I may have solved the riddle whose birth rested inside of my hollowed footprints.
Through my life's strange history,
I’ve burned every bridge that I cross,
But the wolf still gets to me.
I guess it’s no longer a mystery.
I was on all fours crossing a river that once ran like children
But it was dried up, just like my tongue
I have planted words and let them grow only to find it's not suitable ground for harvest.
On this
Same terrain I saw the waving reflection in a puddle that was not my own.
I have been running for so long I fear I have failed you
And I'm sorry.
But I'm only human…
At least I used to be.
 

Reviews

[Devons]

The man who is a riddle within his own riddles strikes again! Dramatic and sometimes hilarious observations, analogies, and imagery speckle this poem like intangible thoughts without end. The wolf of the mind hunting the prey that is as much out of reach as the mind's own escape..
These lines, i think, probably say what i am trying to say much more successfully (since i am not able to PAINT anything in this box!)...

"My condolences to anyone who has read them,
These messages I have taped to the back of train wrecks
So the rescue crew could read them.
As they gasp and as air breaks
It sounds like mistakes"

..Only human, hardly human -as the above lines go somewhat (in my view) towards explaining- are two statements inextricably inter-woven, inseparable, unrecognisable, and indistinguishable from one another...!
COULD i say more...?

[holly]

Very, very powerful language - good write.

[A.Lee]

Excellent write. My thoughts run alongside Devons comment. I love the feel of this poem though. The energy it has when being read. Well done.

[ettorney]

Really well done. I can't rap worth a damn but reading this the flow of the words had me, well, rapping in a shameful M&M wannabe, neverhopetobe, kind of way. The point is if your writing can get a guy like me moving, I can only imagine how great it would sound when a true hip hop artist does it. Please record it and post it here for us.

nice write.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

There are many thoughts running simultaneously in this poem...it is almost like a woven embroidered fabric....