You and Me

Someone I once loved...

My trust for you hasn’t vanished

But my love for you has come to a stop

The thought of being with you

Is no longer the scene

You broke my heart for the last time

No longer will I dream about you and me

If you finally decide you want to give me a chance

Too bad

I’m no one’s second choice 

Reviews

[Megan]

"I'm no ones second choice" if that isn't a smack in the face I don't know what is. I'm glad to see someone standing up for themselves. I wish I had the guts to do something like that but I'm too much of a hopeless romantic. Great write, amazing flow and a powerful ending! The second line was pretty much kick a*s too haha. Thanks for posting!

[misha]

This is a great piece. I love your writing because it holds so much truth in every word you write. Great job!

[freelancejouster]

this seems so final and harsh and maybe it's just what they needed to hear.

[BetanuZwei]

Very powerful and defiant, as others have said. I agree with all of the comments about the last line; it is always good to know where you stand and to have the courage to stick to that. I loved the second line, "But my love for you has come to a stop". This is a great description of what I'm sure many of us have experienced. Well done.

[MandaBear]

"I'm no one's second choice." The best part of the poem, I love it. So full of defiance.

[Lindsey]

Powerful to many people and emotional for others. Well done.

[DeletedUser]

"I'm no one's second choice." The best part of the poem was that, because many don't have the backbone to say that to someone. I agree with Megan, it is a kick in the face. Good write:P

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I love the last line! And the picture you chose for the poem, too--so cool! I guess "The thought of being with you / Is no longer the scene" makes sense--when I first read it, I stopped and kinda looked at it in confusion--but I'd suggest adding something about the scene playing in your head or something...I don't know, that's somewhat cliche, but I feel like it would make the phrase more clear.

[Joe Shetina]

I love it. So full of defiance.

[Ace D Portgas]

A good poem right here...I can feel the emotion that you put into this poem. And thats right you should never be anyone's second choice

You'll find Ms. Right soon

[Sleepless]

0.0what happened and just give it a time a heaert mends itslef little by little :)