Distant Love

The reflection of being so far away

From somebody like you

My heart cries out

For the day our eyes meet once more

I can’t tell you I adore you

I’m frightened of what you might feel

Turning away among not looking back

Tears my mind to imagine we are close to each other

Knowing it’s a lie  

Walking in that packed area the first time

Simply seeing you

In the midst of your beauty that stands out

Reviews

[Seashell]

wawww this is so romantic..If all men thought like this and could put pen to paper, as you have here...all gf/bf hiccups would be resolved...instantly...quite simply because it says it all..All that has to be said...
Thank you so much for share
Will read more of your work 2moro night...About to head home after nightshift... zzz z zzz
Babs xo

[freelancejouster]

it feels very "unrequited lovey" which, you know, is nice. but it's expected. you should try and write about something boring and see if you can bring it life.

[misha]

This is a really cute poem. I love how you describe your eagerness to finally see her..the one. Keep up the great work!

[Lively]

Lovely!

[Ichthus Reality]

Fantastic my man :) great feeling and i totally connect :)

[Elephants & Coyotes]

Decisions are hard.
Especially, when the result can be worse than what's at hand.
Nice write.
=)

[Lindsey]

A truly beautiful writing with a lot of emotion in a small packedge. I enjoyed this very much.

[RedInk524]

Sad, cute, and heartfelt. I like it.

[Darl]

Wow Matthew, if you only knew how much I can relate to this. I too am longing to see someone special who I havent seen for quite a while. Its not easy as you seem to know. The fear of telling her how you really feel. Tearing yourself apart each day you are apart, its the most awful feeling in the world and I congratulate you on putting that pain to words in this poem. Excellent job.

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

There are a couple lines that are just off by one word. In the first line, I'd drop the "off" in "far-off." Then in the seventh line, rather than "among," I think you mean "and." Another line I'd reword is the final one--it doesn't feel like it's the end of the poem. Just my opinion, but changing it to something like "In the midst of your striking/[whatever adjective] beauty" would close it better than having the phrase "that stands out" just hanging at the end...I don't know if that makes any sense, but that's how I saw it. Nice work, though; you improve with every poem.

[Midori]

I really like it. My best friend lives really far away from me so I can kinda relate to this poem.