That Special Someone

How do you get a girl?

Someone as beautiful as you

Most people I talk to just say you’re another girl

But no you aren’t

You have that special look

The one that took my heart

Your smile opens my mind

To the things I’ve never knew

I want to hold you close

On the days that you feel alone 

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

three things. 1) punctuation, you'll need it to create pause in your writing 2) edit. in this you have tense disagreement and you end two lines with the word girl among other things. 3) you could really be a great writer if you focused a little. the concept behind this is sweet and simple and would be quite lovely with work.

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I wish you'd added more detail to describe this girl and explain why you feel the way you do...what exactly about her is beautiful that sets her apart from others?

[Cancelled]

So cute! I love it! Message me sometime!

[Seashell]

so nice that you want to hold her on the days she feels alone....a comforting thought..
Thank u
xx

[RedInk524]

Cute, looks like tsomething you would find in a valentines card.

[Meghan]

Aww so sweet! Good job, I enjoyed this.

[Tasha]

This is really sweet. I loved it!
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Lindsey]

It's really good and well written as well as touching. I enjoyed it :)

[Thea]

Very sweet love...Well done... :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. When someone get our attention. They are our reasons to write and look forward to a new day. Love is luck and timing. Thank you for a positive and beautiful poem of love and hope.
Coyote