Jesus Saves

Jesus saved my soul,

For his blood was spilled,

On the cross he died for my sins,

I am now redeemed,

My life is now saved,

From the darkness of hell,

I will now spend eternity,

With my lord,

Worshiping every longing day

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

"On the cross he does for my sins," I'm not sure what you meant by "does". Unless it was your way of saying "bears"?

Another very Christian and strong poem. This one almost reminds me of a hymn one might sing in church (though I have almost NO knowledge of what would be sung in church). There were a few too many uses of the word "now" for me, but it really got your feelings and gratitude across. For this one, I wanted it to go on longer. But it was still good, and I enjoyed reading about your religion and faith from a person who really seems to value it.

Another good write.

[misha]

This is a great poem! I liked the line, "I will now spend eternity with my lord" Keep up the work

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

It's so uplifting to read a poem about belief in Christianity rather than angry doubts...I really enjoyed this. I agree with Shalynn that the word "now" appears a couple times too often. I think you might want to consider taking out all three of the "nows" and see how it reads without them. It seems like the message would still be there and could be more powerful, with no extra words.

[ako]

very nice..jesus saves..

[Thea Fuentebella]

loved the poem dedicated to Jesus :)

[Angela]

I agree bears works better. Also, Have you thought about saying My life is now saved from the darkness of sin? So easy to forget during the course of the day what Jesus has done for us. Thanks for the reminder.

[J.e.s.s.i.c.a]

This is great, it's awesome hearing from other believers =)

[JanuaryDreamer♥]

i really liked this poem :) i am a jesus freak and this poem, short as though it may be, really made my day :)

[Zachary_James]

I enjoyed this Matt. You Know Jesus did save us and he is our redeemer and firend

[(Loveless)]

love the poem =)